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J3FF3RY1998
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2023-09-16 11:12

Just started this story and it seems extremely promising, some may consider it cringe but I like it seems on the more positive side atleast from my perspective. The Major fault I’ve seen so far is the lack of information about the characters, For example the Royal family are talked about quite a bit but with next to no real info about them. There are other examples but don’t want to spoil anything. Another issue which is kind of minor but bothered me is his starting height which is 2’3 at 8 years old and that is just way to small what is he an infant even if he has that growth issue that messi has he should still be around 4 foot. Other than those the world building and magic system seems interesting and the spelling and grammar are really good and sometimes I feel like reading it is improving my knowledge of the English language. ONce again I’m only at the very start of this novel so this is just my first take and I will make another review once I’ fully caught up.

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Pendulum_
Pendulum_Author

Thanks for the positive review man, some may see it as cringe but then forget archaic English as a whole was cringe. However, I did relegate the English a bit to fit webnovel readers tastes. I didn't add information on the royal family because I felt they weren't relevant to the story yet, it was better to focus on the MC's story for now. And well the MC's height needs adjustment but just too lazy tbh 💀. Once again, thanks

J3FF3RY1998
J3FF3RY1998Lv15

Tbh when I saw the comment I just tried ignoring his said height and considered him 4 Foot

Pendulum_:Thanks for the positive review man, some may see it as cringe but then forget archaic English as a whole was cringe. However, I did relegate the English a bit to fit webnovel readers tastes. I didn't add information on the royal family because I felt they weren't relevant to the story yet, it was better to focus on the MC's story for now. And well the MC's height needs adjustment but just too lazy tbh 💀. Once again, thanks
Pendulum_
Pendulum_Author

Thanks for the support, I'll adjust the height

J3FF3RY1998:Tbh when I saw the comment I just tried ignoring his said height and considered him 4 Foot
J3FF3RY1998
J3FF3RY1998Lv15

Thanks but I’ll miss the old English if possible throw a hidden word in every several chapters it’s always entertaining when It looks like you are making up words until I look it up and realise it’ actual meaning

Pendulum_:Thanks for the support, I'll adjust the height
Pendulum_
Pendulum_Author

Trueee, I can do that actually, that's a great idea!!

J3FF3RY1998:Thanks but I’ll miss the old English if possible throw a hidden word in every several chapters it’s always entertaining when It looks like you are making up words until I look it up and realise it’ actual meaning
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