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Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv141yr
2023-07-20 12:02

Okay, while the 2-Stars may sound harsh, I will explain it. Grammar and Updates are 3-Stars because they are okay-ish, but I often see mistakes when it comes to he/she or other things. Also, the author doesn't correct these mistakes when they are pointed out, so there's that. Story Development: I actually like the Story, no doubt about that, but it's nothing special. ( 4-Stars) And this is where it goes down the drain. Character Design: The Mc is beyond help when it comes to nearly everything. Of course, this is a reflection of how the Author wants it to be, but this is just WOW. The Mc is naive, biggest trust factor I have ever seen, has Mood Swings, the Mc doesn't act like one would in the 18th century and it is actually kinda "Cringe" But the biggest fail was when it comes to the World Background. Spoiler: The Author introduces another Reincarnated Person as the FL. In the Beginning I was like: It:s okay I guess. But the more I thought about it the more it didn't make sense and I realized how forced it was. The Author keeps on saying that there is a reason but I highly doubt it because what reason could there be for her to be here? He could have just introduced a random maid from the same Timline that isn't reincarnated or transmigrated. The reason I think WB is 1-Stars is because with her everything is messed up. Why was she allowed to reincarnate? If she is reincarnated then practically everyone should be reincarnated with their memories intact. The Mc got this because the Goddess accidentally killed him( Which I doubt can happen lol), but she? This was just her dying a "normal" death. Nothing special, so this means everybody is reincarnated with their memories intact, meaning there should be other people in the same World as him. Either everybody gets their own World, but it is shown that this isn't the case. Meaning that other People should be there as well which messes everything up. Also, it isn't shown if this is a parallel World ,a Dream World or anything else. It is just messed up and destroyed every Joy I had when reading this and trust me, I had Joy reading this. I like the Setting and Napoleon, but the FL destroyed everything. Aside from the fact that the Mc sometimes uses Words such as "cool" in front of the reincarnated FL before she even told him that. Which Again highlights the Naive Nature of the Mc. All in all: Great Potential, but you messed it up and considering that you won't rewrite this, it's a lost Cause

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SorryImJustDiamond
SorryImJustDiamondAuthor

Thank you for the honest and a constructive review and I won't say that this is a lost cause because I truly have laid our a perfect plan on how things would make sense together, especially on the questions whether there are others who are reincarnated, or why is the FL here, which would be explained on the later part of the story. I truly hope that you can come back in this and give it another chance, It's doesn't have to be today.

Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

I really would like to man, but I doubt I can before knowing what this is about the FL. and not to be THAT guy, but you haven't finished your other Stories and I doubt I will get to know what this is about her before you probably decide to drop this. Maybe you will finish this but this is so far into the Future that I will probably have forgotten everything about this Book.good Luck tho

SorryImJustDiamond:Thank you for the honest and a constructive review and I won't say that this is a lost cause because I truly have laid our a perfect plan on how things would make sense together, especially on the questions whether there are others who are reincarnated, or why is the FL here, which would be explained on the later part of the story. I truly hope that you can come back in this and give it another chance, It's doesn't have to be today.
Arcane_Warhammer
Arcane_WarhammerLv3

If the ML and FL died together and then were reborn together, then maybe. But technology skip leap ruined the work. Only 2 children really? No spare? He did not tech-skip-leap in medicine. So, where is his lineage's safety net?

Jasonenrick:I really would like to man, but I doubt I can before knowing what this is about the FL. and not to be THAT guy, but you haven't finished your other Stories and I doubt I will get to know what this is about her before you probably decide to drop this. Maybe you will finish this but this is so far into the Future that I will probably have forgotten everything about this Book.good Luck tho
KING_IN_YELLOW
KING_IN_YELLOWLv4

there's nothing we could do

SorryImJustDiamond:Thank you for the honest and a constructive review and I won't say that this is a lost cause because I truly have laid our a perfect plan on how things would make sense together, especially on the questions whether there are others who are reincarnated, or why is the FL here, which would be explained on the later part of the story. I truly hope that you can come back in this and give it another chance, It's doesn't have to be today.
Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

question? Is the question answered If there are other reincarnated people or whatever? Wanna give it another shot, but I need to know that befotehand

KING_IN_YELLOW:there's nothing we could do
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Gabichu_Yeah
Gabichu_YeahLv3

The review literally says it, there is a love interest who is a reincarnated person.

Jasonenrick:question? Is the question answered If there are other reincarnated people or whatever? Wanna give it another shot, but I need to know that befotehand
VXZD_ZD
VXZD_ZDLv4

YEESS this author is really lucky that chose the right app to post his novel because everyone in this app is brain dead and will accept literally any novel as good HE IS NOT A GOOD AUTHOR he doesn't take criticism well because he simply does not try to solve it If he tried to post any of his novels in other places no one would read it

VXZD_ZD
VXZD_ZDLv4

That's the whole point of the review

Jasonenrick:question? Is the question answered If there are other reincarnated people or whatever? Wanna give it another shot, but I need to know that befotehand
VXZD_ZD
VXZD_ZDLv4

there was literally no reason to ruin this history in this level

Fuehrer
FuehrerLv3

I would like to know where that " other places" that u are talking about, u know since this app is full of brain dead plots, I just want to read some good quality novels that don't have plots templated lookalike.. (ps: My English is not good at all so Pls don't mind it)

VXZD_ZD:YEESS this author is really lucky that chose the right app to post his novel because everyone in this app is brain dead and will accept literally any novel as good HE IS NOT A GOOD AUTHOR he doesn't take criticism well because he simply does not try to solve it If he tried to post any of his novels in other places no one would read it
VXZD_ZD
VXZD_ZDLv4

there is a lot other ones so i can't really name one

Fuehrer:I would like to know where that " other places" that u are talking about, u know since this app is full of brain dead plots, I just want to read some good quality novels that don't have plots templated lookalike.. (ps: My English is not good at all so Pls don't mind it)
Fuehrer
FuehrerLv3

Bruh, just say u don't have 1.. But if u actually DO have it, name 1 web/app that u prefer, cuz I've been searching for these kinds of web/app for about a year now.

VXZD_ZD:there is a lot other ones so i can't really name one
Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

Here is the problem you monkey. The Tag was added after he introduced her and many people complained. Think before writing.

Gabichu_Yeah:The review literally says it, there is a love interest who is a reincarnated person.
Gabichu_Yeah
Gabichu_YeahLv3

I always think before making a comment, do you do it? The tag is there, I don't care if it was there before or not do you understand?

Jasonenrick:Here is the problem you monkey. The Tag was added after he introduced her and many people complained. Think before writing.
Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

Apparently, you don't hahaha. I love it when I talk to brain-dead people. They have no arguments and can't accept that they are false. Now my "monkey" fits even more. You are like a child, no arguments, no common sense, but they throw tantrums all the same. "I have no arguments.....so I don't care I am not the wrong one " grow up

Gabichu_Yeah:I always think before making a comment, do you do it? The tag is there, I don't care if it was there before or not do you understand?
Gabichu_Yeah
Gabichu_YeahLv3

Bro thinks calling someone a monkey is an argument HAHAHAHAHA Poor your mother who has to deal with a hopeless chuuni every day, I really feel sorry for her.

Jasonenrick:Apparently, you don't hahaha. I love it when I talk to brain-dead people. They have no arguments and can't accept that they are false. Now my "monkey" fits even more. You are like a child, no arguments, no common sense, but they throw tantrums all the same. "I have no arguments.....so I don't care I am not the wrong one " grow up
Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

You are delusional, aren't you? First of all, your English sucks, get some help. Also, if you really can't see that you are wrong then you really are hopeless.

Gabichu_Yeah:Bro thinks calling someone a monkey is an argument HAHAHAHAHA Poor your mother who has to deal with a hopeless chuuni every day, I really feel sorry for her.
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