English is not my native language. I will write what shortcomings I noticed in this fanfic. The first shortcoming is the multiple strengthening in battle. If anyone does not know, this nonsense was invented by the Chinese. No one becomes stronger in battle. All that people get from battle is experience and more effective use of their skills. The second shortcoming is the unrealistic description of the main character's thoughts. In dangerous situations, people hardly think, they just do. The solution literally appears in our heads by itself, without a path of how the solution came to us. The third shortcoming is the illogicality of the system. Blood is much more difficult to control than ice. Therefore, he should have mastered ice much earlier than the battle with the bear. Mages who control tons of water can take control of blood only during the full moon. But the main character can control blood, but cannot turn water into ice and control large amounts of water. Plus, the main character is strangely weakened. Katara was so weak at the beginning because she did not have a teacher. As soon as he appeared, her development went rapidly. The main character actually has a teacher. The system itself gives him the right moves, but he is slightly stronger than Katara (at the beginning of the series).
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