The plot in of itself is pretty fun, what with the amount of worlds crossed over together, and the author seems to write the characters pretty well. However, the author keeps flashing forward and backwards and having us reread the same exact scene from the perspectives of like five different characters. And honestly it's annoying, confusing, and frustrating. This story has amazing potential, if only it wasn't written by an ADHD gremlin that's high on crack. Just pick a plot line and stick to it, I beg of thee.
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LIKEI find that writing a list of the things I want to include in my work helps keep my mind on track, of course I still get sidetracked on occasion, but it's significantly less often. But also give your work a read through before uploading to catch last minute mistakes, and you'll also find getting extra inspiration in that way. I'm currently in university, and my professors this year are very heavy on essays, so I end up with multiple essays with varying deadlines. I hope this advice helps you as much as it helped me, dude.
You know that second paragraph would be very tough for me to follow. Even if I did, the only thing I'd check is the grammar. ADHD made me too overconfident.
But if you're that busy, can you tell me someone else's work that gain your approval with their pacing and POVs. I don't exactly read other fanfics. I only read the originals in order to understand the lore. Just throw me anything, if you will.
Sure, try anything by thedarkwolfShiro, he does a fantastic job with plot and composition, but he has a problem with consistent uploads.