I don’t want to explain all the reasons it’s bad. Have a look and you’ll understand. It’s very cliche, basic, and extremely cringy.
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LIKEI mean I could go into detail as to why it’s bad but it would waste time I didn’t want to spend at the time. I’ll name a few thing off the top of my head here. The dialogue is very basic with no meaning behind it, the mc uses an op ability very badly, mc is one dimensional, the whole family situation is cringy and so is every interaction with the upper family. The relationship with the girl is also out of nowhere to. So to sum up everything, no buildup and horribly put together.
Again, you’re who thinks this. You expect full outlines of characters from the start without any room for development. Dialouge must reflect characters, I’m not changing it because you think it’s to simplistic. As for the cringe factor I’m going to say that’s invalid as well. You seem like the type to think any sort of drama is cringey, which in that case just means this story isn’t for you.