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2023-08-28 05:44

The one glaring problem is the author’s issue switching between 1st & 3rd person perspectives randomly. It’ll start with he (Elias) doing something then jumping to I (Elias) am doing something. Does that with other characters. A smaller complaint is the transition between chapters. It makes everything feel disjointed. Everything else is wonderful. The world development is interesting. The magic system isn’t tropey. He doesn’t have plot armor defending him left and right. I like the idea of the runes even if I don’t think they’re named aptly. Norse have runes, but I think India and similar cultures technically use scripts.

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