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ShadowAmeratsu
ShadowAmeratsuLv21yr
2023-04-15 06:05

The novel has an impressive plot, with huge room to have the characters roam, but the pilot chapter seemed to lack emotion. It had great detail and amazing descriptions, but when it came to providing emotions or human body language, it didn't seem the best. I hope that it improves as it goes along, but I'm optimistic of its future :)

The Tellus Mage

Junethephatcat
4.7
162 Chs

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Junethephatcat
JunethephatcatLv2

thank you for your constructive criticism. I will work hard to improve😁😁

1yr
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Amera_Mee
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This was an enjoyable read. The focus on Julian's journey in a fantasy world to becoming a strong and capable force is intriguing, and the various elements of this will make you thrilled an interesting layer to the narrative. All in all, this is a great read for anyone looking for an exciting story.

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Darksiidde
DarksiiddeLv11

Good novel so far. I hope the author does not change his line of reasoning during the course of the novel. In addition, for those who like of an MC who gradually develops emotionally and physically, searching for his own identity in a chaotic world, it is a great choice.

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Z_Ril
Z_RilLv14

Reveal spoiler

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Adam_Haddad
Adam_HaddadLv1

Every character is a detailed persona, not just a waste of words. Every action scene, or in general description of images and scenery is almost like watching a slideshow of pictures instead of reading words Great action, Amazing plot twists, Addicting plot.

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helsia
helsiaLv2

the amount of detail within each paragraph is astounding, you can tell how much effort the author put into describing the characters and the world around them. the dialogue also flows smoothly and naturally, allowing the reader to easily imagine a conversation between two characters in their head. this story is incredibly promising and also takes certain tropes and plays around them, which is always interesting to see. the writing in general is almost flawless, as everything is coherent and makes sense without having to reread anything.

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D0nk3yK0ng
D0nk3yK0ngLv6

The one glaring problem is the author’s issue switching between 1st & 3rd person perspectives randomly. It’ll start with he (Elias) doing something then jumping to I (Elias) am doing something. Does that with other characters. A smaller complaint is the transition between chapters. It makes everything feel disjointed. Everything else is wonderful. The world development is interesting. The magic system isn’t tropey. He doesn’t have plot armor defending him left and right. I like the idea of the runes even if I don’t think they’re named aptly. Norse have runes, but I think India and similar cultures technically use scripts.

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Dylan_Hatch_7381
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When they say character development, they mean it. Fantastic story. The definition of a hidden jem.

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m_P3rch
m_P3rchLv15

Amazing. Nice worldbuild, interesting plot. Although some might find particular plot choices cliché, in general author managed to keep one invested. Really recommend and I consider current number of views a bit underrated. Keep up, author!

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mattfuncool
mattfuncoolLv5

Alright, I see that you dome some new change around of the story, and I say you done a good job at it keep it up, my man.

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