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ArgonautLifeLine
ArgonautLifeLineLv141yr
2023-08-10 11:13

the main problem with this story is the grammar please check your wording, sentence structure, grammar, etc. it is readable but its not a pleasant experience. i wish the author could improve on their writing and i whish the author the best in their future endeavor

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Dawn_Nexus
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I got that a lot and anyway, I will not deny my mistake, as I already mentioned English is not my first language. Well, I will re-edit the chapter wherever there is grammatical mistake. And from chapter 30 or 35 something, I have improved the grammar. And thank you for supporting till now.

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Kurama24
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SPOILERS YOU'VE BEEN WARNED: Read till latest chapter (30) Cons: 1. The grammar is just terrible, like u can understand what the author wrote but u will get a migraine while trying to understand it. 2. The interaction between the mc and some characters (especially with jinwoo) feel robotic/emotionless it's just too hollow. 3. The mc still can't accept being a female after living in his new body for 18 years not to mention he has some slightly edgy/overreacting tendencies with jin ho even though the guy did nothing wrong or when the mc used intimidation on a crowd of people just bcz they are fangirling over him. 4. The Mc has too many skills, traits, abilities but hardly uses any of them like i question what's the point of some of them especially frogadier who is just there for no reason and most of the elements he unlocked. 5. There isn't much character development, the Mc's mentality stays the same throughout the 30 chaps unless u consider his weird 1st dungeon dive 6. (This one depends on the reader) The storyline is practically the same and the chapters are fast paced (around 20 chapters to go from jinwoo getting his system to the guild conference in america). Pros: 1. The isn't a pushover, is somewhat smart. 2. The concept of the ff is good especially with the killing Reincarnator's idea. 3. Not sure yet but with the pacing of the ff soo far it looks like it will be multiverse traveling in the future especially since Mc is practically the strongest atm and the whole reincarnation goddess behind him. 4. It's single romance soo far with jin ah, Hae in will probably be with jin woo, insect monarch is still unknown, as for the japanese huntress with tattoos she is normal friends with the mc. TLDR: It's like the author prepared himself to make some french fries but they ended up slightly overcooked and for some reason he mixed them with an octopus flavored sauce so it ended up weird but good at the same time😅

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