really good so far. just work on your Grammer you use in some of your sentences.

Most believeable start to a reincarnation fanfic I have seen yet. The premise of the story is decent, however it seems like it’s a bad Chinese or Korean translation with the multitude of grammatical mistakes. There are also a few spelling mistakes aswell. One suggestion is for the status to space out the skill name and the (x) due to it being a little confusing to read. The character tries to hold onto his “manliness” despite being changed to a girl for over 9years which one would think he/she wouldn’t care about after getting used to. Mind you that this isn’t saying I dislike it, but it’s got a lot of polishing before it becomes “good.” Author of you do read this I recommend before you get to far till it becomes unchangeable to shove your work through something like grammerly, do some spellchecking, and try and make the story flow a little better. Otherwise good luck with the future of your story.

This is probably the first time you've written a fanfic, right? I'll be fair here and say it's not awful but it's not great either, it's actually between bad and meh, sorry. I can feel a bit of personality in your MC, but that's it and nothing more, to be honest you rushed things too much and I hardly feel the impact of events, your MC doesn't seem to feel either. By the way, the only one that can be called a character in this fanfic is your MC and that's for very, very little and that's worrying. This happens with a lot of new fanfics writers, these authors are so focused on making their characters interact in some way with the cannon story that they end up doing everything in a hurry, and then they want to go straight to the next point of the story, you can imagine how it ends, right? If you like writing fics I suggest you take it easy and pay attention to your story, compare it with others you really like and see if you are satisfied with your work, if so, well, keep going, if not, take more time to polishing it. I also suggest some character development arcs, if your MC is someone who just gets it right, it gets boring to follow her story, make her fail convincingly, create flaws for her and let her overcome them! Of course, you don't have to kill anyone or anything like that, but a few defeats build character.

nice starting and literature basically interesting fan fiction

Im giving this all 5 star cuz this was so good i really like the plot and benares from honkai And the shadow and skills please update more and don't drop like other novels that drop at the good parts.

quite well done, I enjoyed the character, his jokes and the trajectory of the story a 10/10. I enjoyed your story very much, keep it up I support you.

13 fluffy foxtails/10 (☆ω☆) ٩(◕‿◕)۶ (´ω｀) (´｡• ᵕ •｡) (´ ▽) (￣▽￣) (⌒ω⌒) ヽ(・ω・)ﾉ (≧ω≦) ＼(≧▽≦)／ ╰(▔∀▔)╯ (¯︶¯) (＾▽＾) (✯◡✯) ＼(＾▽＾)／ (◕‿◕) ｡ﾟ(ﾟ^∀^ﾟ)ﾟ｡ ヽ(>∀<☆)ノ (´▽*) ⌒(o＾▽＾o)ノ (o´▽o) ＼(￣▽￣)／ ヽ(⌒▽⌒)ﾉ ∑d (ﾟ∀ﾟd) o (≧▽≦)o (ﾟ▽ﾟ) (≧◡≦) (⌒‿⌒) (＠＾－＾) (っ˘ω˘ς) <(￣︶￣)> (⌒―⌒) (-‿‿-) ヽ(・∀・)ﾉ (´｡• ω •｡) ヽ(o^―^o)ﾉ (o˘◡˘o) (─‿‿─) (*^‿^*) (o^▽^o) ╰(*´︶)╯ (((o (ﾟ▽ﾟ*)o))) (^人^) (⌒▽⌒)☆

I'll Slap this with my 5 Stars!! Keep up the Good Work~

Don't listen to those idiots who are reading your fanfic for free, but expecting a Premium level story. This fanfic can be considered one of the great 50 of my collection and ranks on the top 20. I hope you will continue it till the end.