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4h0Lv11yr
2023-04-03 06:40

Review as of chapter 11. Preface: overall, this is a well written Kingdom Building/Historical novel. The author knows many readers of this genre dislike system and brainless game-like map-upgrade. His bet paid off, his novel has its own uniqueness and stand out amongst all these mass produced web novels. It has potential to become a hard cover published book. Character development: the protagonist’s growth was insinuated; although the author didn’t flesh out his development; much can be expected during the reminiscence in future chapters. Political exchange: this is a valuable stand out aspect of this novel; the author gives detailed explanations and thought process of all characters involved, not just the protagonist. There are chapters dedicated specifically for different forces’ reaction after the main plot. Business development: the author draws a big cake… how well he will execute one of the important aspects of this genre, remains for future discussion. As of chapter 11, this aspect is there. Militaristic layout: this is the weaker aspect of this novel. Although the author hides his clumsiness in this aspect fairly good; if this novel was evaluated as just another web novel, this aspect can receive a passing grade. However, personally, I have high hopes for this novel’s possibility; as the aspect that will draw in the most readers, I hope he can read other strategy books and improve this aspect in future chapters.

South American Empire

Well_In_a_Frog
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_Beyond
_BeyondLv3

interesting novel nowadays you don't see good historical novel good timeline management need some grammar fixition new genre view noticeable future.

1yr
DaoistBZV5T1
DaoistBZV5T1Lv2

Soy de Colombia que genial está la historia. a. [img=exp]

1yr
pooyan1061
pooyan1061Lv1

I love kingdom building and AU, so the main story idea is very good, although in my opinion, this story have few problem. 1- too much jump in timeline, it is like somebody took a novel and each time randomly post a chapter. you don't know you are reading start middle or the end of it. 2- each chapter or scene change must have a time and location title, to help understand what to expect from environment. 3-too much focus on side stories , how many chapter are spent on sea journey and kidnapping and ... are they main focus of story? I think all could have been a flash back in maybe half of chapter if it affects MC story. I already forgot the where we were before this side story began.

1yr
PeeeRS
PeeeRSLv2

Very good story, with a fairly well-carried development and very well-developed characters, a story that really hooked me to find out what would happen in the future with the empire when it comes into conflict with the world powers of that time.

1yr
Marcia_05
Marcia_05Lv12

I'm in love with your story, that's the first thing I have to say; the process you're going through is undoubtedly splendid, although there are grammatical points to improve, it doesn't prevent it from being totally simple and easy to read. As for the direction you're going with the story I think it's perfect, everything is very well detailed, as well as most of the real events, everything seems realistic and although I don't really like the harem, it's understandable; since it's an empire we're talking about, but if you know how to handle it I'm sure it will be in line with how you're going so far.

1yr
TadpoolMaster69
TadpoolMaster69Lv1

Kingdom Building with a country other than Austria or The Holy Roman Empire. Good details and is quite gory. MC is a functional psychopath.

1yr
TheDestoryer00
TheDestoryer00Lv4

Good Sir This Novel is a masterpiece . True literature Classic . I am truly grateful that i got chance to read it.

1yr
Curtis_martian
Curtis_martianLv3

I love empire stories. i hope to see more chapters soon. There is on thing that irks me though! Why doesn't he have a system?

1yr
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