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Review as of chapter 11. Preface: overall, this is a well written Kingdom Building/Historical novel. The author knows many readers of this genre dislike system and brainless game-like map-upgrade. His bet paid off, his novel has its own uniqueness and stand out amongst all these mass produced web novels. It has potential to become a hard cover published book. Character development: the protagonist’s growth was insinuated; although the author didn’t flesh out his development; much can be expected during the reminiscence in future chapters. Political exchange: this is a valuable stand out aspect of this novel; the author gives detailed explanations and thought process of all characters involved, not just the protagonist. There are chapters dedicated specifically for different forces’ reaction after the main plot. Business development: the author draws a big cake… how well he will execute one of the important aspects of this genre, remains for future discussion. As of chapter 11, this aspect is there. Militaristic layout: this is the weaker aspect of this novel. Although the author hides his clumsiness in this aspect fairly good; if this novel was evaluated as just another web novel, this aspect can receive a passing grade. However, personally, I have high hopes for this novel’s possibility; as the aspect that will draw in the most readers, I hope he can read other strategy books and improve this aspect in future chapters.

"Death allures him". That alone is an impactful sentence.

"Even though his resolve for imperialism wavered; the crown prince's victory strengthen his determination again."

An alliance without name... negotiators spend a tremendous amount of time coming up with a 'cool' sounding name for their signed treaties. Name plays an important role in stimulate a sense of belonging.

"No harm done; My son was able to win against the forces lead by Paez on his own. His iron-blood conviction of the riches in Venezuela disintegrates the foundation of any resistances the literati have."

It's still early into the novel, but the way author wets his readers' appetite about the protagonist's character development is great. I'm interest in reading how he transform a naive 21st century feminist, who stand up against an influential general immediately after being warned by his father for a maid; to someone, who convince thousands of men laying down their lives for a common cause. Remember author, this is a gold mine; don't left it cover in dust and be forgotten.

WOW!!! What a contradictory! The protagonist knew his people CAN NOT read... yet still use the communication method for the 'ruling class' as a mean of information distribution. I understand what author is trying to express. But this need to be rewrite. Newspaper as the 'official' seal for the rumors about the Junta's defeated and its occupied capital.

Author, your strategic vision is really low. In a standoff, your protagonist just yell out the number of men his enemies are contending against... with all their advantages and possible promotion to a high level for your protagonist's head. JUST WOW!

"Bow! Swear allegiance to me! The next emperor of the Colombian Empire." Not PLEASE!

"looking at the headless bodies painting the floor a striking red"