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JustSomeAirBison
JustSomeAirBisonLv21yr
2023-04-21 13:20

I honestly think this has potential to be good. The only thing holding the story back is the MC being more unlikeable than Bakugo. (I stopped at chapter 14 so take this with a grain of salt) The MC is insistent at not changing the storyline too much that he'd let Bakugo torment him during middle school, which is funny because he took Kai Chisaki's quirk and killed him, changing the canon story in the future. He's apathetic, narcissistic and dismissive towards his classmates just because he's mentally older. He tries to pat himself in the back by saying he'd give Izuku a push but all he really does is insult him in his head lol.

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EpicBean
EpicBeanAuthor

Thanks for the review! I do agree that character is a big weak point of mine and I am trying to get better at it. I do think that Nick improved a lot when he met the big three and started to grow a friendship with them. Thanks for the advice though and giving the book a shot!

Zom_bloog
Zom_bloogLv3

I feel like your character was fine, though. It was as "realistic" as van be tbh. I can't imagine the Mc wanting to hang around a bunch of kids and acting like one of them when he is mentally mature than that. I think this type of progression where he slowly comes around is the best. It's not easy knowing the future or at least the general trend of the future.

EpicBean:Thanks for the review! I do agree that character is a big weak point of mine and I am trying to get better at it. I do think that Nick improved a lot when he met the big three and started to grow a friendship with them. Thanks for the advice though and giving the book a shot!
EpicBean
EpicBeanAuthor

Thank you! That was the goal that I was going for, in the end I don't know how well I achieved it and I do think that I could have portrayed it better. But thanks a lot! I am glad that someone likes how I portrayed it!

Zom_bloog:I feel like your character was fine, though. It was as "realistic" as van be tbh. I can't imagine the Mc wanting to hang around a bunch of kids and acting like one of them when he is mentally mature than that. I think this type of progression where he slowly comes around is the best. It's not easy knowing the future or at least the general trend of the future.
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Kurama24
Kurama24Lv4

Stopped at chapter 13 bcz that was my limit but these are the pros and cons imo: 1. The writing quality overall is near perfect there are some grammar mistakes, typos but nothing that ruins the sentence. The only problem for me is that the chapters are too wordy/filled with things can be skipped or summarized. 2. The chapters are long which is good 3. Some chapters were edited/updated so some things ended up getting mixed like him remembering his name and the whole they are/aren't my family and I'm not their actual child thing. 4. The biggest turn off is the mc himself bcz he is a mix of a hypocrite, narcissist, and he's dismissive of his classmates while trying to act all mature even though his emotions got the better of him a few times. The whole issue stems from the mc himself especially bcz of the whole "I'm mentally in my 30s so that's why I'll act edgy and avoid interacting with these 14 yr olds but I'll be good friends with these 17-18 yr olds just bcz they are my age before reincarnating..." like is that 4 yr difference really necessary? if you've read "mha ope ope no mi" then this mc (of overhauled) is like a watered down version of that mc (ope ope no mi). 5. The mc likes to mentally (in his thoughts) bash izuku just bcz he didn't go to a gym to train physically (as if that's going to make a difference) and puts mirio on a pedestal. Like i know izuku isn't that good of a protagonist but people forget he was 4 when his dreams got crushed (quirkless) and the bullying started so u can't expect him to suddenly be like "It's not the time to cry i should prepare to go to the gym after 5-6 yrs and also sign up in a dojo..." that only happens with isekai Mc's. Mirio on the other hand while he was slightly bullied or laughed at bcz he can't use his quirk well, at least he had 1 compared to izuku. 6. 13 chapters and soo far it's just an SI mc since not much changed from the story which makes it boring. Overall this ff is a hit or miss depending if u can tolerate the mc until his character development kicks in which is probably in chapter 20+

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