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Beeruss
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2023-05-23 01:15

To good to be true, shame to be honest. If you guys prefer this type of plot/stories then go ahead, it's good. I won't tell you guys why i give it a low rating because i want you guys to read it yourself. All in all its a good ff, the idea is there no doubt about it but the prosecution(is this the correct word to use here?) is bad. But i kinda get it from the point of view of the author.

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Beeruss
BeerussLv14

Execution, That's the correct word to use there, sorry my bad.

Fernizer
FernizerLv14

That's stupid. 'I rated it low but won't tell anyone why'. Reviews are for your opinions, among other things, and if you don't want to share yours why even write anyhthing? You don't help anyone with reviews like this. And even if you don't want to share specific things that made you dislike the story to not spoil, why not go for something less specific? Was writing good? Was it bad? Average? How was the grammar? The punctuation? Is there a certain plot point that made you dislike whole story or is it the whole thing, slowly developing in a way you don't like? Did you like how the characters were portrayed? Why, or why not?

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GreedyHuman
GreedyHumanLv11

The writing quality of the story is good, although there are some mistakes. I would rate it 4 stars ⭐. In terms of story development, there is too much romance. While I understand that it falls under the slice-of-life genre, since the author included an action tag, there should be a balance between romance and action. As it stands, the excessive romance makes it boring for me, so I would rate it 3 stars ⭐. The characters are well-designed, especially the main character (MC). He is calm, smart, and respected. However, there are instances where he goes overboard with his romance/love for Mitsuri. For example, when he says, "I don't want other people to see your smile," it comes across as possessive. Despite this, I still like the characters, so I would rate it 4 stars ⭐. The world background is well-developed, and the author has put effort into providing detailed descriptions. I would rate it 5 stars ⭐. Updating Stability: ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ (5 stars) Regarding the updating stability, it should be noted that the updates for this fanfic are slow. However, considering that it is a fanfiction and provided to readers for free, I would still give it a 5-star rating. The author's efforts and dedication to continuing the story despite the slow updates deserve appreciation. In summary, I enjoy the story overall, but the heavy focus on slice-of-life elements and excessive romance make it boring for me at times. The pacing can also be inconsistent, with moments of slow and fast pace. Since it's only 13 chapters long, I will reserve my final judgment until it reaches 30 chapters, at which point I will provide another review.

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