Item: Ascendant: Struggle
Rating: 4.8
Author: MiyoIyo

MiyoIyoLv11yr

2023-03-25 21:32

Ascendant struggle will get you hook and immerse into its militaristic powersuit(?) warfare right of the start with its high octane action scene. Author holds just enough information near them to keep the reader wanting more of its worldbuilding while at the same revealing just enough to feed the curiosity appetite. Characters(so far) have their own motivations why they are in the fray, which made me attach to them. The prose is good, however, could work more on dialogue. It sometimes confusing on who talking to who during rapid exchange. Adding actions in between could be the solution. Its a solid 4.8

Ascendant: Struggle

Haizao

4.9

323 Chs

Liked by 4 people

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HaizaoAuthor

Thank you for the review and critique! I'll take a look at the dialogue and see if I can inject a bit more action. :)

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HaizaoAuthor

Also, yes, Frames do indeed operate as power armor/suits.

1yr

HaizaoAuthor

Thank you for the honest critique. I will do my best to go back and clarify places where the speaker is uncertain.

1yr

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