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BrokenandBored123
BrokenandBored123Lv311mth
2024-04-26 01:15

Rapid change of pov, an mc that changes personality every five seconds and cringe dialogue make this almost unreadable.

Supernatural: The Great Hunter System

Millan_Grimm
4.0
194 Chs

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Millan_Grimm
Millan_GrimmAuthor

Thank you for the criticism. Perhaps you only read the first few chapters? The proceeding chapters only have the MC's pov if that's anything.

11mth
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JustTiredOfPicking
JustTiredOfPickingLv11

that's harsh...in later chaps, it gets a bit better...at worst it's 2.5/5...considering the webnovel fanfic standards it's fine...of course unless its ghosty or some unedited mtl...XD

10mth
4
Fanofssj_Hello
Fanofssj_HelloLv3

f that it's good keep up

5mth
Other Reviews
YoureABum
YoureABumLv1

the story is decent but you really don't know what kind of MC you are dealing with. hes made good choices, stupid ones, and questionable ones. he seems to be a bit of a slave to the system as well sometimes and it reflects in the choices he makes. I feel like he's headed toward the cliche morally ambiguous MC that's been extra popular on this app. problem is a story without a framework and without boundaries usually starts losing its steam after losing its mystery. Story is predictably unpredictable, usually by adding a twist at the end up chapters by leaving readers out of the MCs thought process when he makes certain choices earlier in the story. seems like a cheap writing trick but just writing is impressive in its own right. Story is still pretty new so my review might change later. Story is overall pretty good and id suggest giving it a read before judging it.

1yr

IINeeRoII
IINeeRoIILv1

Welcome back Bro. I was waiting for an update. Hope you can finish this book [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update]

1yr
CrimsonFuc1er
CrimsonFuc1erLv4

I’m just sad author decided to implode themself in writing quality for the protagonist. He degrades in quality as time progresses. It’s like the rotting of your favorite. Natural as it may seem it is a pity all the same

8mth
JustTiredOfPicking
JustTiredOfPickingLv11

I'm just making it 10...XD 4|4|4|4|5 (cough... I'm a bit partial because there weren't many supernatural fics lately...longer ones at least) I read this a while back, it got kinda mid. Also, I thought it was dropped. i might change the review after rereading it...

10mth
Maluop
MaluopLv4

Good story but the dialogue is choppy and confusing at times

1yr
Andrew_Alsbrooks
Andrew_AlsbrooksLv14

epic start bro keep it going................

2yr
jaro_onody
jaro_onodyLv3

personaly not a fan of changing the pow every couple lines, it makes the story feel super slow , other than that abit unneeded details like pow from the maid and his sister this just made me skip alot of dialogs. not realy a fan of this writeting where 70% of the chapters dialog is from a side character ,only readed 10chap hope it changes somwhat. otherwise very desent

1yr
MRCAT66
MRCAT66Lv11

It's great to see another supernatural writer,I have my own supernatural FanFiction but it's a bit low,I started following yours recently and I hope I can get some inspiration from it,thank you very much......❤️❤️

1yr
CreationGODBlack
CreationGODBlackLv13

nah man you have really got to never give up on this book,,,, it's a work of pure genius I love it,,,,hey now you gotta promise you'll finish it or else🫵🏾,,,,keep up the good work

1yr
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