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2023-04-03 12:46

Its overall good. But, it feels like a chinese fic. I mean, there is no face slapping or losing face which I am gratefull for. But there are some plot holes too. Just to make them see Main character seen as a competent person, he rescued Howard stark from things which no other normal human could do. Howard stark would've died if he didnt interfere. I mean, In his second save, he idenifies poison in the beverage they bring to them in howard's office. how does he knows what poison smells like? And if Howard was going to die, Who was going to save him in the first place?

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