A unique take where Allen the Mc, is the demon emperor in the game. I do like it, but it’s unfortunate that Allen and his demon wives don’t get to have equipment drops from unaliving enemies nor do they get the double exp like players in special events. Grammar is ok, character development is coming along. My main issue is the situation with the ex who cheated on Mc. Allen already met with her, they hashed it out. He rejected her and is moving on with his in game wives to irl. For some odd reason, the author keeps forcing the Sophia situation. 400+ chapters and she’s still in the picture. Chapters are dedicated to her and her simps when they def could’ve been used to flesh out Allen’s relationships with his seven wives. I mentioned how obvious and forceful these tedious situations were and the author responded by using Amber Heard as an example. Apparently, she’s now accusing Jason Mamoa of something. When I read that response, I sat there in disbelief for a moment, bc what?!? That’s your justification for dragging out this nonsense? Welp, just as I exited myself from reading anything Amber related(bc that too was dragged too long), I am exiting this novel. A shame too bc I really enjoyed Allen and his women. Good luck in your writing endeavors. ✌🏾
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Sad. But I use that case as an example of how a stubborn and toxic person can do a lot of crazy things. They don't know when to stop.
I understood your reference, my point is this particular plot is dragging too long. This is one of the main reasons I don’t read fl cn novels. You accomplished your goal of showing her toxicity, but the forced meetings bt her and Allen, coupled with chapters of her pov has long run its course for me. . Author, the point of my review wasn’t to attack you but just bring awareness. Anyway, take it as you will.
UnholyGod:Sad. But I use that case as an example of how a stubborn and toxic person can do a lot of crazy things. They don't know when to stop.
Honestly, this is getting really annoying. How long are you going to drag out this unnecessary drama?
UnholyGod:Sad. But I use that case as an example of how a stubborn and toxic person can do a lot of crazy things. They don't know when to stop.
Last chapter? That's almost revealing new enemies.
Latife:Honestly, this is getting really annoying. How long are you going to drag out this unnecessary drama?
No, writer, I'm not talking about that. I'm talking about the drama between Sophia and Allen.
UnholyGod:Last chapter? That's almost revealing new enemies.
Yeah, I agree with these guys. Just how long will you drag this drama between them? A lot of people would get sick of it you know?
Your idea is very realistic for sure, but that’s mostly where the problem lies. Readers (especially on here) read for escapism from the real world and their problems. Having a 400 chapter run of the cheating ex is like constantly throwing into the readers face “hey, you got ntr’d, remember that‽” No one wants to ever be in that situation, and the people who have don’t want even their escapism to be tainted with constant callbacks to similar scenarios. Thats the reason most stories on here that start with an ex that leaves them for someone else settles that whole issue within 10-20 chapters max. People simply don’t enjoy it, regardless of how well you as an author can write the drama and interactions.
UnholyGod:Sad. But I use that case as an example of how a stubborn and toxic person can do a lot of crazy things. They don't know when to stop.
