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Yuuki123
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2023-08-10 11:40

bad, story is so slow that sometimes you can just skip a chapter and no storyline still can be followedcharter is inconsistent sometimes he clever sometimes he stupid plot hole after plot hole keep appearing plot twist that not needed is keeping appearing

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AmonBlessed
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Firstly, let me just say that the potential for greatness in this novel is immense! In fact, it could even surpass the quality of your acclaimed Gabriel novel. However, it seems like you're considering taking the safe route by making your protagonist careful and ensuring their triumph. But why not let misfortune have its way and take the story in unexpected directions? After all, misfortune can strike at any moment, catching even the most prepared characters off guard. If you take this daring approach, you run the risk of trashing the "troupe of a winner" trope, which can make for a refreshingly unique storyline. Rather than following the formulaic arc of a successful main character, why not explore the twisted depths of a character like Fang Yuan from Revered Insanity or the Fool of Lotm? These complex and emotionally charged characters could take your novel to the top 3 in no time. Of course, I understand that such a drastic shift in storytelling can be daunting. But with your writing talent and dedication, anything is possible. Even if it takes time to reach the desired outcome, the end result will be worth it. I've been following your work from the beginning and even subscribed, but I must admit that the predictable plot of your previous novel left me disappointed. It's time to challenge yourself and unleash your dark and crazy side to truly showcase your writing abilities. In conclusion, don't shy away from taking risks and embracing misfortune in your writing. By stepping outside of your comfort zone and exploring unconventional character arcs, you have the potential to create a masterpiece that will leave readers begging for more. So let's see what you're capable of!

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