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AlexPendragon
AlexPendragonLv11yr
2023-03-06 07:16

The author has only published 8 chapters for now... I can't judge the writing because i use google translate to read... Updates: quite frequent for now... Story development: a bit slow... Character design: interesting enough even if I couldn't figure out what Teachings I received from the Hindu God... Background of the world: I've been waiting for a long time for a fan-fiction that talks about rakudai kishi no cavalry. ps. (I write with Google translator).

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AlexPendragon
AlexPendragonLv1

I hope it can help you to improve your novel.

Sky_Demon_Order
Sky_Demon_OrderAuthor

I plan to pick up the pace but there is a lot to learn about the universe of rakudai kishi no cavalry

Young_fruit_Smiley
Young_fruit_SmileyLv14

?? you used "they, are & them" for mc... is it a pronoun problem or is it grammar or is it really multiple MC's ??๐Ÿ˜ณ

Sky_Demon_Order:I plan to pick up the pace but there is a lot to learn about the universe of rakudai kishi no cavalry
Sky_Demon_Order
Sky_Demon_OrderAuthor

i wanted to accent that mc had no ego, no ball of consiousness

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