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Overkill
OverkillLv141yr
2023-03-12 05:44

i drop this because it not my type of mc. an evil MC and i feel that he have no bottom line. in which remind me of the holocaust author... you know the dude who committing genocide... yah his mentality is similar, he will do everything to get what he want at any cost... so at the time when i drop it i feel that he would just murder any bystander, children, women, innocents and probably give you the same old excuse that all bad guy gave... a necessary sacrifice for the greater good... which is so that he can do whatever he want whatever that is. which show me that MC is a lost cause psychopath now if i keep reading this it might influent my thinking and i dont like to put myself in the mc, maybe i feel the author gone too far! maybe it become better in the future? but it would be hard to change the picture i have of him now once it already solidify that he is just another villain that i dislike.

Psionic (Marvel)

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4.1
76 Chs

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