This fic is pretty good, I find a odd combination the "gamer system" style with something this grim. But it goes very well, some times the whole system seems out of place, probably because it's not the focus of the story, normally when there is a system is a lot o focus on it, but this fic is much more about a dude dealing with his mental health.
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Thanks for your review! And, well, yeah. I also realized while writing the story, that the system was way less important than I initially thought. Doesn't mean that there isn't a place for it though. I'll be waiting to reveal that.
Also I'd like to point out something about your previous review. When you said that I was too lazy and stuff. So you didn't read it? Well, it's not like you're wrong. I was a bit lazy, especially considering I have a hard time writing a blurb or whatever it's called which makes the book/webnovel sound interesting. I need to put more effort into that part. So, there's no reason to be sorry. Feedback is welcomed, because I'm writing to improve. I don't want to half-ass things, y'know? So if I'm doing just that, be free to call me out on it.
Oh, I not saying it's bad the system not be in focus. I found the guy dealing with his situation much more interesting. I love a good isekai, but it should have a point to the isekai (I read a lot of chinese novels and there is so many isekai that don't chance anything). And may point about the system is that usually when the system is not the focus it is simplify, but is not a bad thing, just different.
Turtle034:Thanks for your review! And, well, yeah. I also realized while writing the story, that the system was way less important than I initially thought. Doesn't mean that there isn't a place for it though. I'll be waiting to reveal that.
Well yeah, if the synopsis doesn't tell me anything about the story I won't read. I rather use my time looking for other fic, the same way I wouldn't buy a book not knowing anything about it. My previous review was not to insult but to try say that the fic needed a better synopsis. If it sound too harsh I am sorry.
Turtle034:Also I'd like to point out something about your previous review. When you said that I was too lazy and stuff. So you didn't read it? Well, it's not like you're wrong. I was a bit lazy, especially considering I have a hard time writing a blurb or whatever it's called which makes the book/webnovel sound interesting. I need to put more effort into that part. So, there's no reason to be sorry. Feedback is welcomed, because I'm writing to improve. I don't want to half-ass things, y'know? So if I'm doing just that, be free to call me out on it.
No, it wasn't harsh at all. So, don't worry about it. It honestly didn't bother me that much, rather, it encouraged me to make a better synopsis.
Celleborn:Well yeah, if the synopsis doesn't tell me anything about the story I won't read. I rather use my time looking for other fic, the same way I wouldn't buy a book not knowing anything about it. My previous review was not to insult but to try say that the fic needed a better synopsis. If it sound too harsh I am sorry.
