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OneArmedImmortal
OneArmedImmortalAuthor2yr
2023-02-15 15:22

um, I like the story but I feel as if I made a lot of mistakes along the way like stretching the story unnecessarily, hmm, grammar is okay, characterization okay, world background okeeey. I am not gonna go soft on myself but taking on an unbiased approach, I feel that deep into chapter 13-17, the story feels bland. Readers are mostly curious about the Jaegers and Kaijus fights which I have kept them waiting long enough. Simply, the main story basically starts at chapter 19 onwards where our MC will start his interaction with the PR characters All in all, I have already learned enough on what I need to tackle when I make any future stories. So it's understandable if you drop.

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DragonGodSmith3000
DragonGodSmith3000Lv14

Will this have a crossover with Godzilla verse

aramix_453
aramix_453Lv4

you lnow the main character should build

Eins_Mensch
Eins_MenschLv14

Why did you change how the mind drift works for Jaeger pilots? Not the one for the MC but the normal ones... the pilots know just about everything about each other when they drift, they feel what the other feels, knows what the other thinks and work together as one.

xPonGx
xPonGxLv14

Lllllplllllll

aramix_453:you lnow the main character should build
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immortal_sword
immortal_swordLv13

whos the fml

Shadow_Gamer1
Shadow_Gamer1Lv4

I WILL NOT F**KING READ IT BECAUSE I DONT KNOW IF ITS OP OR WEAKTOSTRONG

Gulf_Alpha_Yankee
Gulf_Alpha_YankeeLv13

LazyReaderAlways
LazyReaderAlwaysLv4

I like the homesty

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Kelvin_Ade
Kelvin_AdeLv11

am not going to lie author you are a very good writer and you wrote you book very well but I can't stand your MC and don't understand everybody nowadays love writing about dark or villain MC but at least I can stand those but your MC killed everybody on his planet or even his universe just for a crazy experiment and then even add the guts to justify himself and the most unreasonable thing that happened was that that st*pid goddess THAT HER JOB WAS TO WEAVE AND SAFEGUARD FATE was like ho okay you have killed trillions cool, cool how about send you to an other with an OP system so you can you do what you do best MASS GENOCIDE instead of Eternal Damnation for you know the innocent people you have killed. and then he reincarnated and the first thing he did for the outside world was to throw a nuke on it killing hundreds of thousands if not millions of people just for a monster sample when he could have done it another way and he dears think of himself as a hero. honestly I am not against killing or a mad scientist but everyone should have a bottom line or even a drop of humanity, let's take Lex Luther he is somewhat a mad scientist and as much as I hate for some his atrocities I respect him a lot because behind every he has done or willing to do when it time to step up to defend humanity he does it Gallantly almost heroic that the kind of humanity everyone should have especially the MC of a story I mean kids read this for Chris sake, we are humans not monster. I used to Miss the good old days were reincarnation and cheat fanfic and novels are based on karma and the good deeds the MC has done to deserve the chance to reincarnate with gifts and powers from the ROB, those were good times honestly. author you are good at writing I mean really, really, really good and i am not writing this review to discourage you in any way, instead I think webnovel needs more good writers which you are one of them. I just want to encourage you to please write an MC with humanity someone with a bottom line with a little bit of positivity, because the world needs more positivity because even I my self have been in a bad place and it's thanks to God and other fictional characters like Spiderman and especially Superman I read some of his comics that didn't involve fighting especially kingdom come I helped me take my mind off the bad stuff and see hope that makes me wonder why I hate Superman in first place, then I got to know Clark Kent not just Superman and the massage his character sent. I wish you could also write positive MC with your talent I wish you good luck

Sir_Squirrle
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