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FateFracturerLv21yr
2023-08-28 05:14

Man I love this story but the way you write, it's just too uptight, I mean who talk to an enemy with that level of elegance, it's like you are writing a play for opera or something, and there is that sentence that comes again and again "thrilled to explore this new world and experience everything it has to offer." this sentence is almost every chapter before c85 and sometimes it is more than one time in a chapter, and there is this sentence or line that you right in every new paragraph "there heart filled with anticipation and thriller for what to come" I mean come on man don't be so uptight. And don't try too much. The story is good and has way more potential than what you are presenting and please if possible change that uptight writing style. I hope this novel will become one of the best on the platform.

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its chat gpt bro lol (he is using chatgpt to write )

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WARNING - HIGH LEVELS OF CULTURE What can I say, thats one of the most amazing novels i know on Webnovel. It has everything a cultured man can dream of.... beauties, dragons, and dual cultivation... * Writing quality is superb, sometimes I doubt that its his 3rd language. Smooth to read and understand. Lemons have great details, author knows hot to move your lil bro (with words you pe rv...). *As of chapter 70, the story goes with a good pace. We know more and more about the world surrounding our MC. There is a big secret that needs more explanation, but it only pushes our imagination to more speculations. *Character design, to be honest, if you read what author did with mc's mommy, you will be shocked and trust me, in a good way. I read only harems, and yet that was something even i did not expect, genius move by author. Beside mommy we meet his older sis, and a house maid. All of them are great with different personalities. What I want to say is - winc est here feels great. *Update stability, from what I know we will get 2 chaps a day, so its very solid imo. *World background. Mc is a cultivator who uses QI, while the rest of the world uses mana ( inferior power ), reason? no idea. Still interesting, I bet there is a good plot behind it. *Story moves in a decent pace, not to slow or fast. Autor puts a lot of care into his characters, they dont feel one dimensional. You can start a chapter, have lots of fun and just be sad that you have to wait another day for next update. Now the most important part. NO NTR!!!! NO YURI !!!! Im a man of culture, and would not recommend some random disgusting stuff to my fellow daoists. Follow the culture, and give this book a try. I put my left ball on that, and thats like half of my life. Thanks for reading my review. Give this novel a chance, you wont be dissapointed!

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