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FateFracturer
FateFracturerLv21yr
2023-08-28 13:14

Man I love this story but the way you write, it's just too uptight, I mean who talk to an enemy with that level of elegance, it's like you are writing a play for opera or something, and there is that sentence that comes again and again "thrilled to explore this new world and experience everything it has to offer." this sentence is almost every chapter before c85 and sometimes it is more than one time in a chapter, and there is this sentence or line that you right in every new paragraph "there heart filled with anticipation and thriller for what to come" I mean come on man don't be so uptight. And don't try too much. The story is good and has way more potential than what you are presenting and please if possible change that uptight writing style. I hope this novel will become one of the best on the platform.

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its chat gpt bro lol (he is using chatgpt to write )

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