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noobageddon_
noobageddon_Lv141yr
2023-04-12 01:38

Not immersive, girls have the same personality when talking. To much bluntness when talking abou segs, expecially to someone mc just met. Not much of a challenge when getting girls as they all want a piece of mc even when they first saw him. Even a its a 999... yrs old Vgin will gladly open her cat for mc when they first met. lol Overall; not immersive, poor writing, cringe dialogue, a ‘somewhat’ stupid/ignorant mc, no thrill/wish fulfillment and a good story, just need a reread and editing.

Dual Cultivator with a cultivation system

Bloodsniper
4.1
312 Chs

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malinizgeldii
malinizgeldiiLv1

I agreed

1yr
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Daoist_Culture
Daoist_CultureLv15

...And yuri

1yr
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CastlePanda
CastlePandaLv13

You could check out my work

10mth
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Fanfic_Lovers
Fanfic_LoversLv3

Good👍 this MC👇 [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][

2yr

Psan
PsanLv5

... well.. grammar is good. But i hated that mc basically went from sick and malnutrited level 1 kid the size of a chair with nothing that has the strenght of a sick dog... then he opens the starter pack and gets....to being level 100, 6''3 tall with 8 pack muscles. 9 inch D. With a godly rank sword, a godly rank sword skill and enough money to shame anyone, 2 godly physiques that can charm any woman alive with no effort thst has dual cultivstion and merge any new future phsyque he gets at chapter 3.... honest. He got soooo many overpowered things that is extremely excessive and ruins any progression that the story may have. Any random of these cheats is already enough but so many at once? It would have been 10 times.better of he got these slowly in a period of like 30 chapters or more

1yr
Error_Bot
Error_BotLv4

Good the mc is not hypocrite right now as he just being true like his old life being shameless and not trying to trick to get in the robes

2yr
One_Singularity
One_SingularityLv14

Great book , hope author continues with it , the novel is very interesting and has a good introduction for characters. As I am a new author , I can learn from others and their different writing styles which is very good by the way

2yr
timoti_julio
timoti_julioLv1

Good [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

2yr
Ethernal7
Ethernal7Lv4

MC is a narcissistic hypocrite. Every women is unsatisfied with their lovers and is willing to spread their legs immediately. Everything MC says is either stupid, lustful, hypocritical, or ignorant. MC is ridiculously OP for no reason. I could go on, but I'll stop here. The MC is super annoying. There is no meaningful conflict. Everything that happens just so people could suck to MC who didn't do anything. The only thing half descent here is the mindless f******.

1yr
MangaisLife1
MangaisLife1Lv2

MC is an idiot. Last 18 years of his life are not told to us and all thats told is system said suffer 18 years no system and you will be OP He gets system and goes from mortal up 10 levels. Then he decides to spend all the spirit stones system gave him and goes up 2 more levels. He complains about lack of levels when few seconds ago he was saying how people would be jealous since it takes them years to go up a level/s or so. MC didnt even try to save some spirit stones so he's broke. Then he doesnt know how strong he is but decides to go and hunt beasts. I mean he was a mortal and since it was never told what he did so I am assuming he doesnt know their strength etc but is like yep I got cultivation now let me go fight beasts ? Since he was never a cultivator we were never told about his last 18 years of life. Also just because you have cultivation doesnt mean you know how to fight. Also the beasts were higher level so it seems pretty stupid. He keeps saying well I read novels in my last life so I know how this works.... Knowledge he should not possess is somehow just filled in by somehow saying he knows it MC receives a physique which makes him the best looking man in the world. Yes this is the most idiotic thing because he decides to go work in the red light district. The moment he walks there every single girl is like do me...I mean everyone. Girls who have boyfriends, fiance etc...they all want to pay him.... So let me get this straight you just started cultivating and instead of being smart/hiding your identity, you decide to go flaunt it knowing you could be captured? I mean atleast enter brothel masked and talk to people there to work there before showing your face. I mean why doesnt he think they could place slave seal on him? force him to work You are at the weakest cultivation realm and you are going around like an idiot... Yeah I cant handle the amount of stupidity

1yr
GinJac
GinJacLv4

Review at ch 69 The best part of this novel is the segs scenes, which are really hot and well written Very descriptive The writing is good but it's easy to see that the author doesn't have much experience with World building and character design It's more like a wish fullfilmemt The main women have a similar design with no unique character... It's more like they are a better fyc.k compared to other women Nothing special There is a sob story with each FMC and the MC gets 'over' emotional Basically it's not relatable All the villains and mobs are horni and wants to Fyc.k the FMC Overall. .. This can't be considered as a novel but a segs story Don't get me wrong, I'm not against it but I love it @Author you need to give the characters more depth and the females need to have more personality This would improve the quality of this work by a lot

1yr
STUDENT_GLOBAL
STUDENT_GLOBALLv14

author just keep repeating coherent lines and some minor antagonists were just generic

1yr
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