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2023-07-21 07:51

After catching up and hearing/seeing the hate the author received for this story from a few reviewers I felt the need to throw some words on the other end of the spectrum. Grammar and syntax wise there is no issue and the proficiency of English is much better than other novels. Only issues you'll run into are some misspellings. Our MC is Yuu Tachibana, that last name should send shivers down anyone's back if they know of the history of that name from some cultured content. Never fear though as our MC lives in a mishmash of anime worlds so it's not all grim. For the first, I think, 15 chapters, we are introduced to Yuu and his family as well as aspects of his school life. This isn't padding, rather it fleshes out his and others characters so that when the Group Chat is introduced later we understand why he decides to go through with it's dangerous missions. I don't see why people would have an issue with a character's personality and view being expounded upon instead of just having a perfect character with the chat from Chapter 1. Now, regarding how the Chat itself is setup. Currently we only have 1 member (Yuu) and he has only done 1 mission but it seems to be well thought out given how it described the mission credentials and rewards/punishments. I hope the author continues the story once he is done with his other works. As some points of improvement consider the following: When it comes time for Yuu to use the points he gained try not to make him too OP and turn into a Gary Stu. Instead, it'd be better narratively if he gained powers with side effects he has to train for a while to overcome. We can see that Yuu is a bit of a kuudere towards those he cares for. Try to add some extra examples of him being caring or people seeing how caring he is even if he is not outright with it. This will likely stop people saying he's too unemotional when he really does care but shows it in non direct ways. Keep up the great work!

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Ok so I am going to give it 5 stars I myself wrote it, but I am biased bite me. Anyway, the main reason I am writing this review is for the new readers you will likely see the reviews first. The story is slow, not slow in progression but it feels slow because of the low amount of chapter updates, like I only update 3 chapters a week, each chapter being 1500 words, so it is bound to look slow. Another reason for it being slow is I am trying to build the character of the mc and the people around him. It is in the synopsis that the mc will be taking the dimensional chat group to save his family that is a given. But it won't really be as good if we don't know how the family is or how Mc normally behaves in his day-to-day life, Of course, such things can't be done so quickly for me as I tend to write a bit more descriptively and often end up going on a tangent but if you pay attention even the tangents serve their purpose of solidifying the characters that are already there. I know this might be triggering for many readers who are used to the fast development of the chat group fics or fics in general found these days, where the mc gets the chat group/Cheat or power in the first chapter and a mission in the next, but don't you ever feel like 'Why did he accept it like it was no big deal?' 'What are his motivations for doing so?' At times like these there are cliche reason's like 'He is reincarnated so he doesn't think it is weird,' or 'I need to save my family/I want to get stronger to protect my family' I get that it is the same motivation my mc has. But right now I am giving the reason he is willing to go that far, I am telling you through the scenarios that the mc thinks that his family is worth risking his life for rather than just saying it clearly 'I want to protect my family,' because then it looks like a shallow reason that has no substance or base to it in the readers mind. and the mc will be labeled as generic 'I want to save people' before the reader even makes it to the next chapter. I know it happens because I do it myself. And so I have a small message for those that will say 'It is slow' First, consume what is in front of you before asking for more, That is the basic courtesy. You do not understand half of the things that has happened in the nine chapters that are out currently. The chapters are littered with hints you just need to run your brain a little that has been turned off by reading crack fics all day and you'll like the direction, but you'd rather have the answer handed to you on the platter. Anyway, Thank you for reading this. it means a lot to me. if you want faster updates and more chapters use the power stones you have 500 of those equal to one chapter. Also, comment if you find one of the details in the chapters so that others can see what can happen if you use your brain while reading. And comment to reach out to me if you have any questions I'll answer them to the best of my ability, Once again Thank you and Bye~.

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