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Wolv96
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2023-05-07 05:09

It’s a good novel with an interesting premise. Writing quality is good, it doesn’t feel like a chore to read but it does feel a bit robotic at times. Update stability.. well as long as it’s not dropped it is good. The story development is alright, there’s things in the story that can have you questiong the reasons why it happened but overall it’s good enough to read. Personally I’m not a huge fan of stories where people go back in time because Authors have to write a you ger person with an adult personality. This story in particular has moments where he behaves as an adult but moments where he is pretty childish. I couldn’t really connect with the MC either, felt like he had little to no personality to connect with, nothing like being characmatic or funny was shown, just seemed like a side character. I liked Dante the best so far as he had more story to him. No hate though, just giving my opinion. Overall I do recommend reading it, i enjoyed it even with my biased thoughts on the mc. (Got to Ch27~ so maybe this changes in the later chapters)

The Knight and the Apocalypse: A Second Chance at Life

themusicaddict
4.8
98 Chs

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themusicaddict
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i appreciate the honest review, and I'll try my best to improve, and i do see where you are coming from. thanks for the patience though.

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Wolv96
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Sorry for all the typos, taking care of a baby and typing on ipad isn’t fun. Your story is good, hope you don’t take my criticism wrong as I don’t mean to offend or bring you down. I could never write a story nearly half as good as yours so i respect and appreciate the work you and other authors put into making a story. Thank you.

themusicaddict:i appreciate the honest review, and I'll try my best to improve, and i do see where you are coming from. thanks for the patience though.
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themusicaddict
themusicaddictAuthor

no its okay, I love constructive criticism, one only grows through mistakes after all, and I appreciate any and all forms of it. also while I have no clue about raising a baby, all I can do is wish you the best of luck. also, I don't get offended...if i did get offended by criticism i would not be able to live with my family.

Wolv96:Sorry for all the typos, taking care of a baby and typing on ipad isn’t fun. Your story is good, hope you don’t take my criticism wrong as I don’t mean to offend or bring you down. I could never write a story nearly half as good as yours so i respect and appreciate the work you and other authors put into making a story. Thank you.
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