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vorlefanLv31yr
2023-03-20 22:01

Somehow I really enjoyed the story for the bits I read (after all, it has 45 chapters, I read it until the 10th). If you enjoy dragons, stronger MC, and "backing in the time", then you may enjoy this one. Points to improve: Grammar: It has some issues with punctuation, verbing and tensing. But at this point, nothing that a good rewrite can't help. World Background: It lacks a better context of where "we as reader" are, to imagine it better. I'm speaking in the sense of having to know at least a bit of the society, struggles of it and so on. Character: It lacks a bit of inner thoughts and inner struggles of the MC. Example, on the chapter he got "backing in the time", it would be nice to see him struggling, thinking a lot and so on. All in all, keep the good work

The Knight and the Apocalypse: A Second Chance at Life

themusicaddict
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98 Chs

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i as greatly appreciate the criticism, and ill keep all the advice in mind. however regarding the world development, im trying not to do any massive inf dumps about things that aren't nesscarry at the time, as you go on, the world develops and so does the story. but yeah greatly appreciate the in depth analysis, stuff like that helps me improve.

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