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ViduusLv152yr
2023-01-26 03:57

just like his other stories this one is nicely done as well. oddly though the more I read of this story the more I find self not really caring about the mc and the story itself. I am really interested in the other side, the people with the systems. is there any chance we could get a story from their side or maybe a new story. a story with systems with glyphs on people. idk this story is nicely done but for some reason does not hold my attention like your other stories have.

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HideousGrainAuthor

Hmmmm, that's confusing [img=faceslap]

ViduusLv15

sorry

HideousGrain:Hmmmm, that's confusing [img=faceslap]
HideousGrainAuthor

There is no reason to apologise. Glad you like my other novels tho ;)

Viduus:sorry
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Auri_KvotheLv15

Finished reading the whole book. Will post points on each of the 5 Judging points. SPOILERS AHEAD *************************** Writing Quality: Overall generally good. slight grammatical mistakes that are easily over looked. They are consistent errors so once you're able to know what word to substitute for the written one you're good. There are times when names are mixed up, but again, easy to figure out who is being talked about. Stability of Updates: Book is finished. Nuff said. Story Development: This one gets the lowest rating from me. The pacing is all opver the place, and some time skips are sudden and random with no warning given. Also, around chapter 170/207 the pacing takes such a HUGE leap. we go from this guys day to day, to suddenly we're rushing the ending, introducing new kingdoms and entire story lines, with only 30 chapters or less left. The first 100ish chapters had great pacing, and while there were issues with him doing things it's clearly stating he can't, it's good. But then he's suddenly one of the most powerful in the entire dimension? (trying to avoid giving direct spoilers) It feels like Author just got tired of his story and threw in the kitchen sink and everything else, wrapped it up with some random time travel and said good enough. Character Design: Zayne is very well designed. He's well fleshed out and easy to comprehend. The other characters Author takes the time to have him really interact with are also well designed. World Background: MC clearly has memory loss, and in the first half of the novel, Author really draws you in. He makes you want to learn more about this massive realm with the MC. And then he tosses it all down the drain at the end. OVERALL: Decent read. Not Authors best work. Possibly his worst. Rushed ending killed any excitement I had for the novel. Would recommend? No. Would recommend the Author for having a decent writing style? absolutely.

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