Don't make things more difficult than in the original story to compensate for the future knowledge of the protagonist, that always spoils everything, by the way you got too involved in the ghost story, it stopped being interesting and started to be annoying, and to top it all off Of all the problems, he cannot fully obtain the ghost's abilities, and his conversation with the old man ends up killing me, the story starts well but it is already filling up with cliches, and his conversation with the old man only serves to create some kind of a sense of urgency, how annoying, a pity if only he had achieved all the powers of the ghost he could continue but when he nerfed the powers that cost him so much to achieve, he tells me where this will go so bye. PS.: Brazil is a Latin country, Portuguese is a Latin language that, like Spanish, comes from Latin
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There was no need, people are being so delusional. The heck...
at least write a coherent sentence, there was no need to what? rate it as a 3 star which means mediocre?
There was no nerf, idk where you are coming from. He got 80% of the ghost's abilities and only because it was a huge file. So idk where this nerf talk is coming from. And there was no increase in difficulty. Author is just more logical, unlike the brothers, mc doesn't have plot Armor.
what are you talking about? Can you read properly? Are you dyslexic?
... Why are you looking for originality in a fanfic? Of course there are cliche, it's a fanfic, cliches are cliches for a reason.
There are reasons why a cliche is a cliche, it works. However, too many cliches make things boring
"MC doesn't have plot armor" Make it make sense.
