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Night_Spade
Night_SpadeLv11yr
2023-07-06 07:22

A vampire and a werewolf story, a nice book I would say but First! I believe the first chapter needs work. It had errors and was moving too fast. The second chapter was good grammar wise and I enjoyed it a bit I believe it is a good read but it also needs polishing. You all should give it a try

Bloodline Legacy

ZoeTinnah
4.5
125 Chs

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Drew_Archeron
Drew_ArcheronLv1

A werewolf. A vampire. With electrokinesis and Telekinesis. All in one person. What could possibly go wrong? should be interesting to see where the author takes this tale

1yr

ZoeTinnah
ZoeTinnahAuthor

Hi everyone here I come again. Thanking everyone that gives thier time to my novel I really appreciate This time let me take this as A&Q you can ask me anything you want. ready to answer

1yr
Thefantastictouch
ThefantastictouchLv4

I usually try to at least read the first 10 chapters of a book before reviewing it. However, i couldn’t bring myself to do so with this one( i stopped at chapter 2). The reasons are : - The book is too fast paced . I have the feeling that the author is constantly jumping from actions to actions at a lightning speed, which makes it difficult to process the things that are happening. - The grammar is terrible. I'm myself not a native english speaker. I also recognize that it's difficult not to make mistakes while writing. However, there are so many mistakes in this book that it's just too painful to read it . - I, as a reader, didn’t feel the emotions that the author tried to convey . It's supposed to be sad that the Mc's parents died. However, it was so quickly told and dealt with that i didn't get to feel the emotions the author tried to convey . It also didn’t help that we were directly plunged in an action right in the beginning of the story, while not knowing the Mc or his family at all. - The first chapters didn’t answer these basic questions : who is the Mc ( personality and morality)? Why should i follow his adventures ? ( his goal , his motivations or something intriguing / interesting about him ) - The writing itself is problematic. The formulations, the structure of the sentences, the almost absent and/ or confusing punctuation, the badly done descriptions( when there are proper descriptions to speak of) , the dialogues... i know it's an app on which there are many aspiring authors. However , it's not an excuse for neglecting these basic problems which might make a book with a good story to tell, so distasteful that people simply don’t want to read it. All in all , the first chapters of a book are like its showcase . So , please author , try to write them correctly in your next works.

1yr
Phionah
PhionahLv1

A werewolf, A vampire , electrokinesis and telekinesis all in one person. It's a nice novel which is worthy anyone's time. Come one, come all let's support the author

1yr
Mrhekko
MrhekkoLv3

The writing quality started out not too bad but trust me it gets better after the second chapter. The concept is a little weird but I like it.

1yr
chimychimes
chimychimesLv11

man, I'll love to give more credit. But your work needs polishing... i know its'shard but bro, it's quite rough, to reread a chap to understand it... y'know you read it during free time so having to do some mental work while reading again is quite troublesome. But trust me, there's room for improvement. The work is quite raw, unrefined, so it's quite hard for the reader. I'll love to tell you the truth 🙏. So good luck in improving 🙏😉🤓

1yr
Tianah_ann
Tianah_annLv3

I love the story development. love that it's different from the usuals. Keep writing author 💌

1yr
MZAF
MZAFLv12

I love the plot and the writing style is way easier to understand compared to other novels I read so far. Keep up the good work author.

1yr
James_Cook_0293
James_Cook_0293Lv13

I know I haven't gave this book enough of a chance I like the begining of it but truly it hops dates to much for me to keep up with but I like the overall layout of this novel

1yr
JoannajhZXG3
JoannajhZXG3Lv3

Well-deserved 5-star rating. Went back to the first chapter, that was what captivated me the most. Keep soaring author ,❤️🔥🔥❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

1yr
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