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This just bad. All these ocs, and the mc isn't even the main focus. The mc is weaker than the original spiderman. And he doesn't even act like an adult.

He’s supposed to be this cunning veteran with experience and discipline but he acts nothing like this. He gets set off by high schoolers when just ignoring them would do the trick. He acts more of a man child sometimes, like going off on a high school girl, legit yelling and snapping at them when he hitched on a ride with one of his basketball team members for sneaker shopping. Like dude, you’re the one riding with them. They’re annoying sure, just bare with it, have some discipline for gods sake. What happened to the whole Indian army veteran thing, it’s like the author forgets the background he gave his mc most of the time. Then there’s the whole adding other oc insert characters with abilities like stopping time.

I did a quick Google search the top earner in collage basketball can make is 52,000$ as an entire team and I also Did a quick search it costs 48,000$ to treat cancer or some times 1 million plus $ And this are the very top earners how the heck will he make that much money But if he Stole from some Big Drug guy he can easily cover the cost in like 2 weeks of running and looting and use a Dark not spider costume and then after the treatment is Done start Doing the good in spider costume easy and I Dont like how you have to specify his country kinda cringe I am also Indian but why tho

simply your character does not match to the military commando background cuz a simple incident makes him overreact

To begin with. If you expect anything like your classical spider-man story of good person saves the day because it's the right thing to do, don't read this. This is a "cool and dark spider-man for older kids". With that all of the way... it's very well written, but the protagonist is either annoying or cringe(the writing style also feels a bit cringe sometimes). The way that he thinks and acts it's cringe he almost feels like and isekaied dark protagonist that it's super aware of what he is. Also the author just throw up a bunch mashed up writing ideas, it almost feels like he didn't want to make a spider-man fanfic to begin with.

Initial Evaluation: Average Well written when it comes to thought process and few unnoticeable grammar mistakes. Problem is the originality, this is your same old spiderman. Reincarnation & foreknowledge isn't optimize, adult thinking is nothing, army style strat is zero. Can y'all please make a chaotic neutral and streetsmart spiderman? nothing changes from cannon MC to y'all reincarnated or transmigrated OC MC spiderman. make a difference dude and that would entice your reader more.

So Mc is a special force army soldier from India. Hes reincarnated into Peter Parker with full power and Super genius mind from the beginning His way of making money is by basketball ( never thought an Mc would do something like that). He seems to have some goodness in him when he doesn’ want to rob the bad guys but still doesn’t want to be a hero. Its good with the world background and grammar but its a fic where you need to follow with the authors plan since( which is okay) Anyways the only way he though of making money was through basketball not much else shown of his so called super genius intellect. Thanks for the hard work in trying to write author san 3/5

If you guys are expecting this to be a spiderman fic then don't.