Spacing is terrible and the whole origin story is just so forced. Hermione taking Ron's side over a dumb argument would never happen and Dumbledore using the dumbest person in the world as a pawn just makes no sense, Ron couldn't keep that kind of secret and Hermione would of dropped him when she found out. can't get passed it. gave it a 4/5 just because I couldn't read past the first chapter and the story might have developed into a decent story after such a bad start.
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LIKEI don't think the Author writes seriously, I mean look at his name he's doing this just for fun and sometimes to get the story going you have to write whatever. I enjoy this because it is not something something you have to think about while reading, plus I have really wanted to read a Narnia fanfic since a long time.
I can't deny anything you just said. and while its still hard for me to enjoy, it makes complete sense why you would. you are an enlightened soul! I'll shall carry a piece of this wisdom on my journey!