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DetachedDreamer
DetachedDreamerLv142yr
2023-01-19 11:00

Spacing is terrible and the whole origin story is just so forced. Hermione taking Ron's side over a dumb argument would never happen and Dumbledore using the dumbest person in the world as a pawn just makes no sense, Ron couldn't keep that kind of secret and Hermione would of dropped him when she found out. can't get passed it. gave it a 4/5 just because I couldn't read past the first chapter and the story might have developed into a decent story after such a bad start.

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Just_for_fun1997
Just_for_fun1997Author

This fanfic, we can create whatever we want.

M7TH1C
M7TH1CLv14

This review Is one of the dumbest things I've seen In a while...

Overlord_X
Overlord_XLv5

I haven't read a Narnia fanfiction before .it's good so far . just don't stop updating suddenly

Just_for_fun1997:This fanfic, we can create whatever we want.
DetachedDreamer
DetachedDreamerLv14

youre right but it doesn't mean it isn't trash can soup. Good luck with this story i can't wait to see all the future reviews!

Just_for_fun1997:This fanfic, we can create whatever we want.
DetachedDreamer
DetachedDreamerLv14

coming from the person with more tham 10 original works and zero chapters of actually story between em. lol you must be sensitive to reviews. its understandable. you should stick to reading and not writing.

M7TH1C:This review Is one of the dumbest things I've seen In a while...
uncreativeguy
uncreativeguyLv4

I don't think the Author writes seriously, I mean look at his name he's doing this just for fun and sometimes to get the story going you have to write whatever. I enjoy this because it is not something something you have to think about while reading, plus I have really wanted to read a Narnia fanfic since a long time.

DetachedDreamer:coming from the person with more tham 10 original works and zero chapters of actually story between em. lol you must be sensitive to reviews. its understandable. you should stick to reading and not writing.
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DetachedDreamer
DetachedDreamerLv14

I can't deny anything you just said. and while its still hard for me to enjoy, it makes complete sense why you would. you are an enlightened soul! I'll shall carry a piece of this wisdom on my journey!

uncreativeguy:I don't think the Author writes seriously, I mean look at his name he's doing this just for fun and sometimes to get the story going you have to write whatever. I enjoy this because it is not something something you have to think about while reading, plus I have really wanted to read a Narnia fanfic since a long time.
Rb_Rabby
Rb_RabbyLv3

hey man you gave this 4 star. What do you mean exactly?

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Tyler_Baker_3884
Tyler_Baker_3884Lv4

I will say I love this also you said something about a discovery of witches and to me that's a happy face what I really wish you would do is write a discovery which in fanfiction because there's not a lot of them it would be really cool for someone to be either reborn in the discovery of witches or go to that world and become very powerful like I really wish that Diana would have just owned her powers and not put up with the congregation that was something that I really wish I mean she was a weaver she could have created magical barriers over the castle and it would have been very hard for them to get in so I'm hoping that you do something like that I really like this even though it's flowing like the same way it is for the movie even he to me he is adding character but that's fine I really want more interactions with their app they ask him questions about certain things I haven't really got that far in hopefully that's the case other than that I think this story is really good I do think I really wish that his personality would have changed be a little bit more blunt that's one thing that I would expect for Harry to change after he got stabbed in the back and even after he you know got over it and everything but I really hope that if anyone sees my comments on here that please write a discovery of which which is fanfiction even if he goes to discover which is that would be cool but kind of make it more original where you know he goes there or something and you know that's where he starts to live after all these events happen and he said that his own business in that world I would really like something like that so please please update I think it's a good story hopefully someone will write a primarily a discovery of which is fanfiction because I think someone should

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