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Newbie_TyperLv121yr
2023-06-12 22:40

The story's all good and everything. It's just that the MC is ruining the entire thing. I get it that he doesn't want to kill others, fine. I also get it that he got overpowered without any sense.But most of the time, the intersections between characters don't make sense when the MC is involved.Also, he keeps on wasting time while fighting the enemies and everytime, some stupid unknown logic prevents the situation from going bad.Like once, the MC wasted like 20 minutes fighting some D rank Vampires when he just defeated an SS Pheonix in a few minutes.And the thing is, he wasted time when the lives of tens of Cat peoples were in danger and the stupid unknown logic was that they somehow escaped and Vampires who captured them already were unable to catch them.

Reincarnated with an Analysis system.

Kirito_K5
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Yo, Author here, Kirito_K5, rewriting this review for new readers. The beginning chapter for about 30 chaps in, are not exactly impressive, but you have to understand, it was learning to write well at that point. I noticed my improvment from around the second arc, the vampire raid, and my story writing took a good turn during the war arc. I ask that you be patient enough and get to the 2nd arc before deciding if you want to drop or not. All love added.❤️

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Psan
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Well... its not bad... but its filled wirh plotholes, inconsistencies and mistskes. He allows mc to do actions that should be impossible for him to acomplish... he was a regular highschool boy and he can dodge a veteran sword strike, catch arrows midflight from elves with his hands. Wield a sycth so well. He can block a rain of arrows from dozen epves with ease???? He did not had any combat skill at all... and mc is so confident lol... not even 1 day and he orders elves to bring him to a F phoenix to desl with thst has been terrorizing elves for hundreds of years?.... you must smoke a lot of wêęđ lol.

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Alanray64
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Typical story line where MC dies and is reincarnated with a system. Low EQ male with a number of love interests and no clue on how to deal with them. Elements of kingdom building, though it is not to advanced at the moment. Overall it is an interesting novel, though the only negative drawback is that the author hasn’t taken time to proofread his novel. The number of grammar and spelling mistakes is not pleasant to the eyes. I recommend the author take some time out and check his writing in advance. Anyways, it isnt to bad of a read. 👍

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fabulous story.... great book..... well done

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Slime but wo everything that makes it great. The plot is rushed and convenient. I love harem, but the sequence of events are ridiculous and mc actions are nonsensical. I know that there is some profound plot behind his actions, but there is no build up to that plot. The reader is throw out of the loop far to many times and a "notes" chapter shouldn't be necessary to fill plotholes.

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SnowApathie
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A well done story .

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the_god_of_plot
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while reading the synopsis should I read this or not, hmm saw "fan of rimiru tempest" yep def reading this

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Man_of_culture
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There are so many grammar mistakes, or just mistaking a word for another. The story leaves a lot of essential things out. Hope the author will make a few edits on the first few chapters so at least the new readers could get invested in the novel.

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