Well... its not bad... but its filled wirh plotholes, inconsistencies and mistskes. He allows mc to do actions that should be impossible for him to acomplish... he was a regular highschool boy and he can dodge a veteran sword strike, catch arrows midflight from elves with his hands. Wield a sycth so well. He can block a rain of arrows from dozen epves with ease???? He did not had any combat skill at all... and mc is so confident lol... not even 1 day and he orders elves to bring him to a F phoenix to desl with thst has been terrorizing elves for hundreds of years?.... you must smoke a lot of wêęđ lol.
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I'd like to ask if you read the auxiliary chapter? regarding his strength, I'm pretty sure I added the over powered tags, when he first arrived he out ran a grim reapers and was surprised, he already had superhuman abilities. regarding meeting that Phoenix when he arrived, its in the auxiliary chapter, I explained why he does somethings. Men you guys really making something I enjoy really stressful
i did read. but thats not the problem. you made mc acomplish things he shouldnt be able to do without training or getting the related skill. i dont mind OP characters. but you must give a reason. You cannot present a normal highschool boy and 1 day later he can fight like a master. while he did get abilities and maybe the strenght of the grim, slime and some resistances. but this does not justify his overwhelming combat skills. you can edit the chapter that absorbing the grim he was lucky to also get the grim reflexes, combat expertice and scythe martial arts. then we have no problems... example... i can be as strong as hercules but i would still be a horrible fighter since i dont know martial arts. i may overwhelm my enemies wih brute strenght for sure... but to also do so with master fighting skills i didnt have? we have a problem. did you understand? you must justify mc abilities, he cannot acomplish something he did not have before... you will just confuse readers...
Ahhh, I think I see the confusion, but first thank you for this well detailed review, people like you are why authors grow every day. My mc got Reincarnated, meaning he his not an high school boy any more, although I haven't reveled what he Reincarnated into, and I won't because of spoilers. but know my mc (identity) is known to be extremely strong, I don't know how else to explain it but I do hope you understand.
i see... i take that the race he now belongs have at least the perks of being naturally skilled in combat. but you still can improve your writting... mc can for example question himself... why i can fight so well? why i can use the scythe so skillfully? how did i catch an arrow midflight.. this way you justify mc ability with a mistery. and readers will wonder... what gives?... then start checking things... until the only unknown variant is his current race.
I'll improve on that, thank you. ✌️😁
honestly your review is still too high I'd give it a 1* but at this point IDC. throw it the 🗑️
