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leonsama13024
leonsama13024Lv37mth
2024-04-10 05:52

Você está alongando demais a história que já ficou chata, você não está entrando em nada de interessante e não está criando um enredo original, está fazendo muito filler, assim como em seus outros trabalhos. Espero sinceramente que você não continue assim.

Naruto - Minato Namikaze SI

RaccoonLeague
4.6
155 Chs

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FenikeX
FenikeXLv14

eai? melhorou?

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RaccoonLeague
RaccoonLeagueAuthor

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Luizz_Ricardo
Luizz_RicardoLv10

the original minato is much better than this copy, author nerf mc........................................................................................................................

10mth
sunny_mediratta
sunny_medirattaLv4

Reveal spoiler

10mth
weslley
weslleyLv1

1yr
JapaOuO
JapaOuOLv4

We're starting the story for now, so I don't have much to say.... the story is well written, but the update rate is a little bad, mainly because the author posts the chapters and deletes them to change something .... but that's not a bad thing, it's just that we've been at the same point in history for some time

1yr
Ole_Tessmann
Ole_TessmannLv4

Like most of his stories it’s soooo slow. Like infuriatingly slow. It’s seems to be a trend in all of his works, some more than others. I just read 13 chapters but not even 2 days had passed in the story. Sure it builds immersion and stuff but there’s so much description of his thoughts for every action he or anyone else takes so I find myself skimming most of it. The writing is superior to most of the other fanfictions on here and I’m sure there’s already a set direction which he is going to take the story in. It’s a story you can read when you’ve got nothing else that is good but not something which makes you want more and more of it.

3mth
DiabloRedfox
DiabloRedfoxLv13

the MC is just a heavily downgraded OG Minato with apparently "better physique" but is tired out faster than Choza, bruh doesn't know that you don't have to mutter your thoughts so every single person can hear you, he doesn't seem to have a sliver of "Genius Talent" other than the apparently rare 3 chakra affinities, can't even use the light fruit abilities as of now which should be instinctive, at this point the only good thing about this is the AU, that part seems fun, will delete this and give better review if it somehow gets better later and I haven't dropped it

1mth
Funny_Gamer_3397
Funny_Gamer_3397Lv1

Reveal spoiler

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Baneofthedragon
BaneofthedragonLv5

Love the story, its a slow progress type of fic but it builds the characters and interactions, and makes them more relatable and believable. Great take on the relationships between characters as well. Good job, keep it up

9mth
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