Perhaps the author can write better, but even if he can, he doesn't do it, so it often annoys me when I see simple grammar mistakes. When it says murder wizard, I kind of expected him to go independent, but maybe he'll leave the village later. Character is mostly fine, just that I'd prefer he kept being a bit more in control when he has an adrenaline rush. Lowered score mainly cause of the grammar and the decision for him to have loved ones in the story. It's not what I'm expecting when I click to read a story called "a murder wizards adventures".
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First of all, why can't he have loved ones and be a murder wizard? Secondly, I don't think my grammar is bad? So if you could point out what it was that made you think it was that would be great :)
I love your story so don't let it put you down, but the most glaring issue that I've seen with your grammar would simply be FAR too many run on sentences. I've seen paragraph long sentences quite a few times while reading. Other than that, there are quite a few typos but that kind of thing is sort of expected with a story thats getting released as fast as yours is. I can't wait to read the last little bit of the book, so please release them as fast as you can lol
It's been a month since I left that review. Kinda too lazy to read again and search for mistakes.
Another thing was, for him to be a murder wizard, he can't just have the average kill count of the world's average fighter. He would have to have way more oofs.
why would you leave a review saying my grammar is bad tho? cuz I am a native english speaker and english lit was my best class so I'm pretty sure you would have to really look for grammar mistakes to find any, but your review might give potential readers the idea that my grammar is like MTL or something.
Thank you for pointing that out! I can't improve if no one tells me what I do wrong. I think I did notice that though because I'm pretty sure that I tried to add periods or space out long paragraphs, but sometimes there isn't a good time to split it or I was writing the chap on my notes without wifi. It's hard to tell how the formatting will change when I paste from notes to here.
Nobody's gonna think it's mtl quality.
if i read a review that says "simple grammar mistakes" then the first thing that comes to mind is MTL
Those aren't simple grammar mistakes, they're pizza tower size mistakes. They come from Chinese which has a totally different sentence structure than ours which makes it very difficult to read.
Simple grammar mistakes means messing up simple grammar, like saying 'he plane fly' instead of 'he flies a plane', thus making a mistake of simple grammar
That's why I commented that, it's impossible to compare MTL with minimal errors, I'm sure most people here read the fanfics even when there are bad grammar warnings (I'm not saying it's the case in your fanfic)
