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ShamelessGengar
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2022-12-29 03:09

Writing Quality: 3.8/5 Little to no, misspelled words, grammar is good enough to not lose your mind. My last English class was over 10 years ago in freshman year of college but it’s perfectly understandable. You may notice some mistakes but nothing that makes you upset like you’re reading MTL. Author could use more contractions in character dialogue which would make the conversations seem more natural. The thing that stands out the most is the unnecessary capitalization but again, grammar is going to be better than 90% of the novels out there. Author should also look into utilizing semi-colons (;) and look into Pro-writing aid or at least run it through Grammarly. Some sentences are…odd. Stability of Updates: 4/5 I just read it today and took a peek at the table of contents to see how the release schedule is. It looks very stable to me at nearly daily releases. Can’t comment on the rest of it as I didn’t read too far. The novel feels a bit too formal and stiff, for lack of a better term. I'm still gonna give it 5 stars because I'm soft and dislike giving reviews that lower the ratings. I leave that for other people, I also don't want to be the reason that someone might miss this novel and it turns out to be what they were looking for.

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Champsing
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well, ty for you your review. I am working on quality. hope I improve (lol!) byyyyy

ShamelessGengar
ShamelessGengarLv1

Look into pro-writing aid, that's a fantastic tool, I don't remember if it's free or not. If anything, you can just run stuff through Grammarly though.

Champsing:well, ty for you your review. I am working on quality. hope I improve (lol!) byyyyy
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