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Pirate_CK
Pirate_CKLv22yr
2022-12-26 15:22

Bro, I just want to say don't make it any more cliche then it is already is i know you are new writer and trust me i appreciate it, you are doing what you desire but please dont take refrence from cliche chinese protagonist, wahi same old tournament arc, academy arc,or sect arc man make him a roaming adventurer in search of power or get him a wife and make them a legendary duo . trust me it will bw more intresting to see them become legendary chracter then same old freaking revenge driven story its my point of view as i m not a critic but a reader hope u make it intresting

Stains of Red

Czzi
4.5
32 Chs

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Czzi
CzziAuthor

100% understand, as cultivation novels are all I read. But the reason the tournament was included so earlier on was to give an excuse to showcase the main characters abilities as well as give a reader the idea of the power systems of the world the book takes place. If you have read to chapter 5, I completely skip over an standard ‘young master’ arrogance and give a valid reason for group alienation. One of the main reason for such an earlier tournament ‘arc’ was to introduce current and future characters, and because if it weren’t for this, basing on the personality of the Mc consistent with the past few years of timeline, he wouldn’t get himself in nor seek any fights. As the main character improves in due time, I wanted to show his starting point. But thank you for the review, and I’ll try my best to avoid those cliches.

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Pirate_CK
Pirate_CKLv2

Thanks for reading my commentm, I will look forward to your new releases 👍

Czzi:100% understand, as cultivation novels are all I read. But the reason the tournament was included so earlier on was to give an excuse to showcase the main characters abilities as well as give a reader the idea of the power systems of the world the book takes place. If you have read to chapter 5, I completely skip over an standard ‘young master’ arrogance and give a valid reason for group alienation. One of the main reason for such an earlier tournament ‘arc’ was to introduce current and future characters, and because if it weren’t for this, basing on the personality of the Mc consistent with the past few years of timeline, he wouldn’t get himself in nor seek any fights. As the main character improves in due time, I wanted to show his starting point. But thank you for the review, and I’ll try my best to avoid those cliches.
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Czzi
CzziAuthor

No problem, I hope to meet your expectations in future chapters. But if you have any thoughts such has you see a character that’s being inconsistent or an event that seems to be a plot hole or doesn’t make sense, leave a comment next to it so I could edit or explain the event in future chapters.

Pirate_CK:Thanks for reading my commentm, I will look forward to your new releases 👍
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Conquistadore
ConquistadoreLv14

I absolutely agree with you.

Czzi:100% understand, as cultivation novels are all I read. But the reason the tournament was included so earlier on was to give an excuse to showcase the main characters abilities as well as give a reader the idea of the power systems of the world the book takes place. If you have read to chapter 5, I completely skip over an standard ‘young master’ arrogance and give a valid reason for group alienation. One of the main reason for such an earlier tournament ‘arc’ was to introduce current and future characters, and because if it weren’t for this, basing on the personality of the Mc consistent with the past few years of timeline, he wouldn’t get himself in nor seek any fights. As the main character improves in due time, I wanted to show his starting point. But thank you for the review, and I’ll try my best to avoid those cliches.
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Conquistadore
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#CULTIVATION #HAREM , are some of my various tags I refer to, when looking for novels to read. Author you have my attention. Please lead the way, and show me what wonders await me on this journey, in this world you are about to shape, with pen and paper, and with a pinch of imagination and creativity.

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Lacyan
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The story is rich—which can be attributed to the author's vivid imagination. Every chapter is filled with immersion, as if the author witnessed the scene itself. It starts off slow, and can be lengthy—though it's not necessarily a bad thing as it helps build the world that tha author is trying to portray. If you want a novel with vivid scenes and eloquent words. You might want to check this out.

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NobleRemmy
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A great inspirational historical novel this is...the Synopsis actually got to me and intrigued a haste to read the book but I wasn't disappointed when I did. Great going Author...wish you the best on this amazing piece 👌

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VoidEyes
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One of the better written stories I have read on WebNovel. Keep up the good work author.

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Morororo
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Fantastic beginning, a great one! Although I never am sure how to feel about romance cultivation, it's an interesting one, but I don't understand romance. A great novel indeed, but forgive me, this is not my cup of tea.

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Czzi
CzziAuthor

Of course, as the Author, I’m going to be a bit shameless and rate the book a 5. Let me know what you guys think and if you have any suggestions, feel free to implement them in the comment section .

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Cuanyin
CuanyinLv1

I love cultivation novels that don’t start off offending some young master. Although I would prefer the Tournament to be extended a bit further into the book, I think you did a great job explaining characters and showing personality. Even though there are only a few chapters out, I am still able to get an idea of the type of people the characters are. Great novel so far author and I hope to see more chapters soon.

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Alex_morg
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Very good cultivation novel from my perspective although it has only 8 chapters as of now it has already hooked me looking forward to more chapters of this wonderful novel. It has almost no grammar mistakes too. And if u like u can use Grammarly app for proofreading. Thank you for this amazing novel author I hope u continue to entertain us.❤️❤️

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Dawn1429
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I really enjoyed reading the book so far, I’m looking forward to seeing where this is going!

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