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Tristan_Morgen1234
Tristan_Morgen1234Lv152yr
2022-10-21 22:35

So far so good. Nothing really to complain about. All very positive results. Not to fond on the MC being betrayed by his loved ones but that's just me personally. The idea is good and it's a good start to the novel. Looking forward to seeing what this novel will become. Hopefully not too much betrayal. Would be cool to see some guilty individuals who regret what they did instead of being the heartless twits that are so commonly seen on this platform. Other than that, I'd say it's a good start.

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Resurgent
ResurgentAuthor

Glad to know your thoughts. Thanks 😊

StarVenerable
StarVenerableLv3

I don't know about the last part. It was like they were puppets. If they weren't and they were just following in the order to kill him of their own will, that makes it even worse. They're fanatics.

CadenVanV
CadenVanVLv4

You know it says that you haven’t read it yet, right?

Tristan_Morgen1234
Tristan_Morgen1234Lv15

There are many novels that I haven't fully read on this platform for nearly a year.

CadenVanV:You know it says that you haven’t read it yet, right?
CadenVanV
CadenVanVLv4

If you’re going to review a novel, you should have at least read it

Tristan_Morgen1234:There are many novels that I haven't fully read on this platform for nearly a year.
Tristan_Morgen1234
Tristan_Morgen1234Lv15

Have you heard of having multiple accounts??

CadenVanV:If you’re going to review a novel, you should have at least read it
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Redsafgg
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I apologize right away, English is not my first language. I agree with the previous comment, up to 500-600 chapters our main character influenced the plot, it was interesting to see how he made plans, how he realized them, how he gained strength. The world order itself was interesting, the conflicts in it and the situations our protagonist found himself in were well described, so they were often difficult, but gave him the opportunity to somehow get out of them, using the intelligence or strength he had acquired earlier. The dynamic with the female characters was interesting, the way our protagonist used them to overcome his trauma of mistrusting others, etc. But somewhere after chapter 600, it's like a different work, I don't see our hero as something that has been building for 500 chapters, now he's a dog running from point A to point B and unable to affect anything. Some plans are just discarded, if they exist at all. It feels like every antagonist got +100 IQ, and our hero got 100. And even the power that he had, it's like it just disappeared, if before our hero could fight some of the strongest characters alone, now to defeat one, he has to gather a whole group, I realize that because of some nuances he is limited in using all his power, but it doesn't suck that much. And starting at chapter 720, the river of shit started. With incomprehensible and unnecessary drama that makes you want to quit reading. To summarize, perhaps the author needed to take a break and think things through better, because everything that is being written now is too confusing. I'm going to put this work aside for now, maybe I'll finish it someday, because right now I have no desire to continue

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