Review Detail of Daoistc9ad68 in MMORPG: Rise of the Primordial Godsmith
Review detail
Everything goes great for the MC at all times. Oh look a set back! Nah, it just turns out 10 times better than expected! Everyone loves the MC the moment they meet him. My suggestion: Add in some adversity or something... Make the side characters more than just background applause for anything the hero does. And please hire an editor!
MMORPG: Rise of the Primordial Godsmith
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while i agree that the story needs to improve i really cant agree with your criticisms. the character so far have been behaving in a pretty logical fashion and adding random adversity wouldn't have fit the current storyline, we are still very early in the development and adversity will only make sense in the future. th actually valid criticisms of pacing and inconsistent mc to allow for exposition aren't even mentioned which makes me doubt the validity of this review. And on the requested for an editor I'm even more confused, the grammar is excellent and there've been exceptionally few typos (i habitual leave corrections and I've rarely ever write so few, were talking no more than 10 in 100 chapters) edit i went through my comment history and counted a total of 7 mistakes noted by me that's literally less than 1 typo/grammar mistake per 10 chapters (idk/idc about punctuation but i noticed nothing too egregious...)
oh don't mind him he is just some random author using his alt account to give a bad rating to other succesful authors work, just check his account info you will understand
Kotik_Kotik:while i agree that the story needs to improve i really cant agree with your criticisms. the character so far have been behaving in a pretty logical fashion and adding random adversity wouldn't have fit the current storyline, we are still very early in the development and adversity will only make sense in the future. th actually valid criticisms of pacing and inconsistent mc to allow for exposition aren't even mentioned which makes me doubt the validity of this review. And on the requested for an editor I'm even more confused, the grammar is excellent and there've been exceptionally few typos (i habitual leave corrections and I've rarely ever write so few, were talking no more than 10 in 100 chapters) edit i went through my comment history and counted a total of 7 mistakes noted by me that's literally less than 1 typo/grammar mistake per 10 chapters (idk/idc about punctuation but i noticed nothing too egregious...)
He is not exactly wrong, but you are right too. It's more the fact that the world our MC finds himself in is a bit unrealistic. The word itself is too simple or agreeable if you kind of get what I'm saying. I don't know if it's because it is a video game world where things are not supposed to be so deep or because the author didn't bother to do proper research into this time period.
Kotik_Kotik:while i agree that the story needs to improve i really cant agree with your criticisms. the character so far have been behaving in a pretty logical fashion and adding random adversity wouldn't have fit the current storyline, we are still very early in the development and adversity will only make sense in the future. th actually valid criticisms of pacing and inconsistent mc to allow for exposition aren't even mentioned which makes me doubt the validity of this review. And on the requested for an editor I'm even more confused, the grammar is excellent and there've been exceptionally few typos (i habitual leave corrections and I've rarely ever write so few, were talking no more than 10 in 100 chapters) edit i went through my comment history and counted a total of 7 mistakes noted by me that's literally less than 1 typo/grammar mistake per 10 chapters (idk/idc about punctuation but i noticed nothing too egregious...)