Item: MMORPG : Ancient WORLD
Rating: 3
Author: Ethernal7

Ethernal7Lv42yr

2023-01-26 06:40

The story is comfortable to read, but there are a fair amount of grammar problems. We get a little snippet of most fight scenes and then the conclusion. I'd say the biggest issue is how every enemy is a total pushover. Someone shouldn't be able to give three full powered slashs before their higher leveled opponent could even react. Nearly every fight scene yet has such issues.

MMORPG : Ancient WORLD

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