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ofir_israeli
ofir_israeliLv41yr
2023-01-10 00:52

a great novel overall, engaging story enough realisem and great mc.

MMORPG : Ancient WORLD

Aibek
4.4
583 Chs

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pb_jelly
pb_jellyLv15

you probably didn't get much farther that chapter 41 huh?

2mth
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Pelusakiki
PelusakikiLv3

I really love this novel I can't help but wonder about what will happen next,I totally recomend this! （╹◡╹）

1yr

Ethernal7
Ethernal7Lv4

The story is comfortable to read, but there are a fair amount of grammar problems. We get a little snippet of most fight scenes and then the conclusion. I'd say the biggest issue is how every enemy is a total pushover. Someone shouldn't be able to give three full powered slashs before their higher leveled opponent could even react. Nearly every fight scene yet has such issues.

1yr
pizkel_
pizkel_Lv4

Potential: A Execution: B- Grammar: D- Cliche Amount: A+ Overall: B- Great idea and storyline, but the author ruined by not even TRYING to fix the grammar mistakes. I get not having english as a first language, but for god's sake just put it in free Grammarly or even a Google Doc

1yr
Stygian_Monarch
Stygian_MonarchLv4

Hello, fellow author. I'm going to give you some constructive criticism. 1: Please show what's happening in the story more. •In your story, you tell the reader that the character feels a certain way. Ex: "He felt confident." Here's an example of showing your protagonist's confidence."He raised his chin high, looked his opponent in the eye, and smirked." You can increase your word count if you explain each emotion. And your readers can immerse themselves better. 2: Please don't repeat the same information twice In the same chapter. •This disrupts the reader's immersion in the story. •I know it helps add word count, but that frustrates readers. 3: Your grammar needs some work. It's hard to immerse yourself in a book if there are many grammatical errors.

11mth
TabooExistence
TabooExistenceLv14

good book so far on chapter 117 but to much padding to explain a simple items takes like 3 chapters. also the mc likes to forget some important stuff.

1yr
sparks786
sparks786Lv4

I accidentally stumbled upon this story I really liked it.... Please Author don't stop the chapters update if possible please increase them I know Asking is very much but I really enjoyed your story

1yr
DarkLordLinus
DarkLordLinusLv11

Reveal spoiler

1yr
ShadowSage
ShadowSageLv11

Great story and world building. But MC character isn't my favourite. classes and skills are the best I have seen in any novel. keep going forward.

1yr
Pochi_Sanchez
Pochi_SanchezLv3

I like the novel but will the release rate change in the future? 1 chapter a day is too little

1yr
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