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zesty_9615
zesty_9615Lv12yr
2022-12-19 19:50

Great story, great writing. Kept me immersed the whole time, aching to read the next few lines. Parts meant to be humorous were done well, and the intense moments keep you on the edge of your seat. The one thing that I would criticize is the trope-- I really hope that this MC does not become the "overpowered" type where he always has some dumb trick up his sleeve to get out of a situation. Author has done well so far, but tbf I was scared at the last chapter before the ending. Overall, definitely recommend this and can't wait for volume 2.

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Krypton71
Krypton71Lv12

It’s so f * cking chaotic. I wanna preface this review by saying I listen to novels with a text-to-speech so my experience will be different to many others probably. Writing Quality: Initially I thought of it as some disgustingly horrible grammar, but you realise the stilted text is a style that reflects the way the MC thjnks and the story is carried out. I can’t help but feel it adds so much charm to the novel and if it was done intentionally, was such a big plus to not give anything but full marks. The lack of Obvious POV changes makes this slightly confusing, but again, I like to think it truly adds to the charm and the style has got better into V2. 10/5 stars. Updating Stability: well I binged what might have been one of my best reads of the year in essentially one go, so I haven’t got much to comment on this, but from what I can see it’s pretry good. 4.5/5 stars Story Development: Phenomenal. I f * cking love the way the story has gone so far. It’s so chaotic and (insert other adjectives) that it has me too fking eager to read the next chapter. I’ve been on a reading material dry period for the past month and so this was like a bottle of water in the desert. God this is so f* cking good. 6/5stars Character Design: Insanity. This guy is insane. He’s so deranged it hurts my brain trying to figure him out. And I f *cking love it. I can literally feel him getting progressively insane through the novel, and the way his tendencies and possessiveness is written is honestly beautiful. Like the build up to it I thought was really natural and all round wonderfully planned. The side -characters too are honestly great. I love MC’s interactions with them. 9/5 stars. World building: Pretty good. Upon reflection, I feel quite in tune with the world and the school. Sure, the focus of this is the character and the plot but it doesn’t take too much away from the world building. I’ll give it a healthy 3.5/5 stars. I know I’m being biased here, but this, as I said, was like a bottle of water in the middle of a desert for me. This has genuinely got me as excited as when I clicked next episode for anime like death note or code geass. It’s genuinely a thrilling read and I’m surprised it doesn’t have more views honestly. Maybe it’s time to blow it up on discord servers hmm Nice one author, keep it up!

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