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2023-05-10 15:16

I have no problem w/ the writing, I just find this really boring. This just proves that you could do things right but would be deemed worthless if the story is boring itself.

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A great piece in the making. So, I got into this after completing the "Blood Unleashed". This might be my personal bias but believe me when I say it Morpheus' works never disappoint, so I've no doubt it'll be a great one just like his previous 2. Now for details: Writing quality: 5/5 Author ain't no newbie. The writing skills have been refined a lot and there are close none of the grammatical mistakes. The style caters to my own personal taste hence you'll get nothing but praise from me. The writing gives me the fairy tale goosebumps as well as it's easy to immerse myself in the world. Story Development: 4.5/5 Now this is only because my personal taste. But the initial MC intro part Wasa bit jarring for my taste. That's why I'm deducting a .5. But other than that the story profession so far has been phenomenal. Character Design: 5/5 I'd say this one is where the author's skills shine through. The characters are so fleshed out that it's easy to imagine yourself in every characters shoes. Now, not many characters have been introduced so far as it's been very little chapters but every single one of them has been interesting nonetheless. World Building: 5/5 Dear author, you have such a gift with your world building. I was impressed with the blood unleashed one and I admit that This one does live upto the hype. It's never boring. The shroud of mystery as it thickens and thins invoke so much tension and so many feelings, that I admire as a reader. Your works make me realise that there are so much more to the world's of my favourite fics than the MCs. Thank you for such a great fic. Overall: 4.75/5 If you haven't read it already then what are you thinking and what even are you waiting for. Just go ahead and immerse yourself in totally different story in a familiar 'one piece' world that we all love and admire. P.S.:- The review has been made when there were only 18 chapter. I'll update this review and score as the time passes.

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