Coming to 40 Chapters in and I thought I should do an initial shameless 5 star review before the end of Volume 1. First, thank you to those that have read my novel and those who may read it in the future. It is my pleasure to share my hobby and passion with you all. I believe my novel started off a little better than average, but thanks to the input from readers, it quickly improved for the better. Once the first 10 chapters, my opinion is that the quality only rises. The story is still in the early stages, the enemies and bosses from the games still haven't shown. Lucian had only just set on the path to finding himself (ch.38) and many of the girls' stories haven't even started. I update daily or twice the following day if I am late. The typical upload times are 12:00pm - 4:45pm British time. Once it's contracted, I will consider adding incentives for bonus chapters! This will be a long novel, so I apologise to those that wish for a fast pace and instant story. It will take a while to build up to the moments where he finally confronts the original hero, Lance, or the people who killed both his and Carmilla's parents. I won't rush this to make sure people can see more of their beloved characters and it doesn't end with a single chapter about how he became god and became unfeeling. (Most Cultivation novel endings.) The characters are my beloved creations. Because of the slow pace of my novel, most of them haven't even shown 10% of their true selves. Just like in reality where you can live with a woman for years and she still does things that will shock you. Or leave you stunned. I don't want them to be finished until the very last moment and so you will notice many characters start off jolly and active, yet further on you might find out they were born into an assassin cell or suffer from various ailments. Duke_Asmodeus
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Okay this is a nice review
Great I love slow stories as long as the growth of the Mc's strength isn't too slow. Having slice of life chapters that show off the romance and daily life of the main character and his lovers. As long as they aren't too boring and absolutely nothing happens. A story being slow also usually means that there won't be too many time skips and missed or forgotten details. Of course no one wants a traing arc that's too long but otherwise as few as possible time skips are preferred.
I try to keep my training arcs as brief as possible split over several I'm between lore,slice of life and the main story. It's hard to balance as some people enjoy meaty ones and others not so much. My goal is to keep the flow running so there is enough of both the meaty rpg feel and good amount of slice of life and main story to keep things from grinding to a halt. Thanks for your own personal preference as it helps to know what many people prefer so I can improve my story for the better!
Lazy_Chicken_God:Great I love slow stories as long as the growth of the Mc's strength isn't too slow. Having slice of life chapters that show off the romance and daily life of the main character and his lovers. As long as they aren't too boring and absolutely nothing happens. A story being slow also usually means that there won't be too many time skips and missed or forgotten details. Of course no one wants a traing arc that's too long but otherwise as few as possible time skips are preferred.
Traing=Training
Lazy_Chicken_God:Great I love slow stories as long as the growth of the Mc's strength isn't too slow. Having slice of life chapters that show off the romance and daily life of the main character and his lovers. As long as they aren't too boring and absolutely nothing happens. A story being slow also usually means that there won't be too many time skips and missed or forgotten details. Of course no one wants a traing arc that's too long but otherwise as few as possible time skips are preferred.
author is Mc dumb or smart
He's a little idiotic in the earlier chapters. Then grows and starts using his mind after some development. He will become both an intelligent Noble and powerful warrior as the story continues.
_BLACK:author is Mc dumb or smart
it's a good book but i can't really take the mc seriously because it's mentioned again and again that he has a face as beautiful as a girl and i don't understand why he doesn't have a beautiful face but it's masculine instead of feminine. Are the girls bi and therefore like female faces or does the mc just like to look female. I personally don't like it in any case, I think male mc should also have male traits and not female ones. But still a good book.
Because I like the beautiful young master types who are drawn to be handsome in an androgynous and pretty way. It's really my own preference and nothing to do with anything else. Thanks for the comment and feedback.
Zerus:it's a good book but i can't really take the mc seriously because it's mentioned again and again that he has a face as beautiful as a girl and i don't understand why he doesn't have a beautiful face but it's masculine instead of feminine. Are the girls bi and therefore like female faces or does the mc just like to look female. I personally don't like it in any case, I think male mc should also have male traits and not female ones. But still a good book.
Ok👍
Duke_Asmodeus:Because I like the beautiful young master types who are drawn to be handsome in an androgynous and pretty way. It's really my own preference and nothing to do with anything else. Thanks for the comment and feedback.
However will tone it down/ find better ways to express his beauty. Thanks for your input
Zerus:Ok👍
When will his ptsd ends. its just the same stuff over and over with him seeing the truth then forgets about it later, kinda getting frustrating.
Well Ptsd doesn't end in reality. But this isn't reality. It's pretty much over by the current release chapters and there was a perfect reason he kept 'forgetting.' Thanks for the feedback thought.
PeerlessIsLonesome:When will his ptsd ends. its just the same stuff over and over with him seeing the truth then forgets about it later, kinda getting frustrating.
Kingdom Building ? (No Tag) !
10 is max D: D: didnt want to tag till it starts! Don't want to make people sad
WISEDRAGON:Kingdom Building ? (No Tag) !
how does one even become progressively smarter? Is it one of those where mc isn't ambitious or doesn't care much in the start?
Duke_Asmodeus:He's a little idiotic in the earlier chapters. Then grows and starts using his mind after some development. He will become both an intelligent Noble and powerful warrior as the story continues.
Partly due to his circumstances. He aims to improve himself at various points, in both power and knowledge. Also plot for why he's happy go lucky and want to avoid spoiling too much, forgive me.
tortle:how does one even become progressively smarter? Is it one of those where mc isn't ambitious or doesn't care much in the start?
k, I'll give it a try then
Duke_Asmodeus:Partly due to his circumstances. He aims to improve himself at various points, in both power and knowledge. Also plot for why he's happy go lucky and want to avoid spoiling too much, forgive me.
Just two chapter and I'm left annoyed by all the constant praise for MC appearance, voice, demeanor and so on. Personally, I'm not against a few sentences of description or praise but having it, always, always on each paragraph, each chapter make it very tiring to read. Just hope the other chapter won't be full of it 'cause it'll be hard to continue on reading.
NTR ? ?? ?
