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SherlockPXO
SherlockPXOLv131yr
2023-01-24 07:55

-+The theme and the world itself were very interesting, but the early chapters did have a lot inconsistencies in particular with the system status. -This might be just me but it felt like the value of each status felt off, like strength somehow made some1 very fast and agility was largely ignored. -Also some times it is hard know if the mc is strong or weak and what the level actually does. -The first 20 chapters could also use a small either rewrite or edit, right now it is the biggest turn off and considering those are what make a person stick with a novel, I would recommend the author do it. +The characters feel very alive and that is some hard to find these days, especially in a harem novel. The girls are not just empty husk although at some point they start feeling similar because of the overwhelming and what not. +The MC character development was pretty good soo far but I'm still confused about some things that happened during it.

Vampir Lord: Erotic RPG

Duke_Asmodeus
4.8
206 Chs

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Duke_Asmodeus
Duke_AsmodeusAuthor

I'm editing/rewriting the first 30 chapters as it would happen (Chapter 2 finished today at a level similar to my Dragon Lord's Chapters.) These were written only 2 months after I started writing. So I apologise it's taking so long to come back and touch upon them; the new chapters will use the power system later, which makes it less wishy-washy. I can't do it fast as I have 3 contracted novels and 1 non-contracted to write daily, which takes 5-6 hours for a single daily release for them all. I also lacked many concepts of balance with attributes back then. Thus it should feel a little more grounded and immersive once the rewrite finally gets posted.

1yr
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Alias_scaleheart
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Honestly surprised this doesn't have mire reviews, its quite a good read so far and it definetly has potential keep up the good work!!......

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Duke_Asmodeus
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Coming to 40 Chapters in and I thought I should do an initial shameless 5 star review before the end of Volume 1. First, thank you to those that have read my novel and those who may read it in the future. It is my pleasure to share my hobby and passion with you all. I believe my novel started off a little better than average, but thanks to the input from readers, it quickly improved for the better. Once the first 10 chapters, my opinion is that the quality only rises. The story is still in the early stages, the enemies and bosses from the games still haven't shown. Lucian had only just set on the path to finding himself (ch.38) and many of the girls' stories haven't even started. I update daily or twice the following day if I am late. The typical upload times are 12:00pm - 4:45pm British time. Once it's contracted, I will consider adding incentives for bonus chapters! This will be a long novel, so I apologise to those that wish for a fast pace and instant story. It will take a while to build up to the moments where he finally confronts the original hero, Lance, or the people who killed both his and Carmilla's parents. I won't rush this to make sure people can see more of their beloved characters and it doesn't end with a single chapter about how he became god and became unfeeling. (Most Cultivation novel endings.) The characters are my beloved creations. Because of the slow pace of my novel, most of them haven't even shown 10% of their true selves. Just like in reality where you can live with a woman for years and she still does things that will shock you. Or leave you stunned. I don't want them to be finished until the very last moment and so you will notice many characters start off jolly and active, yet further on you might find out they were born into an assassin cell or suffer from various ailments. Duke_Asmodeus

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user123_4
user123_4Lv4

really good .i like it and I'm going to read your other books too after this. I'm satisfied so far . I'm only in 100 ish chaps. but it already feels worthwhile so five star review for now

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EternallySen
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As the true first reader of Asmodeus' book, I can proudly say that u won't be disappointed XD ...... .................... .... .......

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Melshan
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Kamijou_kaito
Kamijou_kaitoLv4

the mc the one who ntr others right?.......

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Hidden_Paragon
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can't wait for more chapters. .

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Wild_Zeelo
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I give this story 5 stars becasue I really enjoyed reading it, the author really has good sense of humour and his grammar is top notch. Girls are like Pokemon picking but i don't really mind it [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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Lemon_Pope
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Easy 5 star for me Mc have good development Characters are well designed Story have good progress and is well paced And interactions with mc and his girls are just gold One of the best harem novels I have read

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