although I haven't read many chapters (only 14) here is what I have found. the story has no major grammatical errors, so it is easily understandable, and the story does seem to be interesting, but that is about it. the pacing is very bad, the mc is supposedly getting super powerfull items extremely fast, which breaks the whole idea of something being rare. if everything the mc gets is supposedly broken, then those things can only be considered normal to the reader. next is the rivals/enemies. the mc supposedly got many overpowered abilities and summons from the start, yet still gets his butt whooped by a guy that is supposed to have weaker abilities / items. so although this story is quite interesting to start, it is hard to really enjoy. my advice to the author is to just slow down a bit, flesh out the enemies, and the main characters allies a bit more so we have a deeper attachment to them. And the last thing is to make the mc work more for his items/abilities, free hand outs are nice and all, but if the mc receives basically everything quite easily (yes the mc doesn't necessarily receive them easily per say, but when he receives multiple super op items within a chapter or so without any real build up. that is what I mean by easily) then the reader doesn't get the satisfaction of the mc getting that hard earned reward, which in my opinion is the whole point of putting something like that into a novel. other than that I think it is still a pretty good novel overall.
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WoW~ Thank you so much for your review ^^ I will take note your remind and try make this book better ^^ Thank you so much!!!
Well surprisingly the author is doing well with the book
Well surprisingly the author is doing well with the book
