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Navigator_Ray
Navigator_RayLv42yr
2022-08-04 14:58

keep up the good work author 👍 👏 , and it would better if u can make the paragraph bit short and give less info. But nice work I know writing is hard[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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devonsewn
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It's funny because I thought I would increase the information to give more context. I will try to reduce it in the following chapters, maybe after chapter 10; you have to understand that I have to flesh out the whole family background in the next chapters. Just bear with it for now. ;)

Navigator_Ray
Navigator_RayLv4

what I am telling is not cramp too much info in 1 paragraph, star a new it makes it easier to read and less messy. As for giving more context it's understandable and totally up to u .Anyway thanks for replying 🙂 ☺️ 😊

devonsewn:It's funny because I thought I would increase the information to give more context. I will try to reduce it in the following chapters, maybe after chapter 10; you have to understand that I have to flesh out the whole family background in the next chapters. Just bear with it for now. ;)
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