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Kw0z
Kw0zLv142yr
2022-08-18 00:38

Honestly trash. It’s a good concept, but the main character is a gross pervert, and the story was completely ruined for me when Nine (a love interest) started watching other’s have $*x.

Valkyrie Smash

Nomanalive
4.5
391 Chs

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Layios
LayiosLv11

To me, it doesn't feel wrong for MC acting like that, we even got few other people who did the same as the MC but ended up punished. He also had the guts to do it 'cause he has acces to the system thing where he could edit the report. As for Nine behaviors, it's more like a child curiosity that led her to spy on them, since she was curious, she spied and asked Doctor why, how, and what is it.

2yr
12
Kw0z
Kw0zLv14

It’s still weird that she enjoys watching other’s do it to me

Layios:To me, it doesn't feel wrong for MC acting like that, we even got few other people who did the same as the MC but ended up punished. He also had the guts to do it 'cause he has acces to the system thing where he could edit the report. As for Nine behaviors, it's more like a child curiosity that led her to spy on them, since she was curious, she spied and asked Doctor why, how, and what is it.
2yr
13
Nomanalive
NomanaliveAuthor

Just to be clear at that point Nine didn't know anything about what they were doing and as layios said she was just curious about what they were doing. I would say that situation was more like her watching an animal kingdom documentary than it is watching people getting it on. I won't say you're wrong for thinking it's wierd though. everyone are free to think what they want about the plot, that's just how reading works.

Kw0z:It’s still weird that she enjoys watching other’s do it to me
2yr
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DaoistYz2Ici
DaoistYz2IciLv1

will the character of the mc evolve? Because he looks like a third rate pervert especially the way he manipulates women's feelings and I hope he doesn't get ntred by Odin because since he created them he should have a way to control all his valkyries

Nomanalive:Just to be clear at that point Nine didn't know anything about what they were doing and as layios said she was just curious about what they were doing. I would say that situation was more like her watching an animal kingdom documentary than it is watching people getting it on. I won't say you're wrong for thinking it's wierd though. everyone are free to think what they want about the plot, that's just how reading works.
2yr
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Nomanalive
NomanaliveAuthor

I aspire to improve my writing so it's only natural that there will be character development (since it's one of the most essential parts of a story) And no, no NTR. NO!

DaoistYz2Ici:will the character of the mc evolve? Because he looks like a third rate pervert especially the way he manipulates women's feelings and I hope he doesn't get ntred by Odin because since he created them he should have a way to control all his valkyries
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Layios
LayiosLv11

Also one of my worry and I wonder what'll happen in the future, will MC just be there as "emotions support" to all Valkyrie or will he have more important role? I also hope he get a bit more decisive 'cause rn he's still dreaming, he'll need a wake up call.

DaoistYz2Ici:will the character of the mc evolve? Because he looks like a third rate pervert especially the way he manipulates women's feelings and I hope he doesn't get ntred by Odin because since he created them he should have a way to control all his valkyries
2yr
5
Lady_Phaena
Lady_PhaenaLv11

It truly is a good concept but the male lead truly is trash. It would be nice if his character was truly the "cold and indifferent" person he portrayed himself to be and the book was a cool romance.

2yr
15
_GoldenStick_
_GoldenStick_Lv3

Protag chad is better

Lady_Phaena:It truly is a good concept but the male lead truly is trash. It would be nice if his character was truly the "cold and indifferent" person he portrayed himself to be and the book was a cool romance.
2yr
4
dao_of_truemagic
dao_of_truemagicLv1

man have you watched po#n before.this is a serious question.

Kw0z:It’s still weird that she enjoys watching other’s do it to me
2yr
4
Kw0z
Kw0zLv14

My personal life doesn’t correlate to her being a voyeur.

dao_of_truemagic:man have you watched po#n before.this is a serious question.
2yr
7
Evilswordmank423
Evilswordmank423Lv4

it will be better if mc got power up

Nomanalive:I aspire to improve my writing so it's only natural that there will be character development (since it's one of the most essential parts of a story) And no, no NTR. NO!
2yr
3
Salmon_El_Solomon
Salmon_El_SolomonLv3

I have a question, you watch adult videos? If your answer is yes or not it doesn't may,do you think a girl doesn't see? If you have a girlfriend or some girl who you can talk, ask her. It's the same, but a reality show. She only see it secretly, she doesn't joint and they don't know she is there.

Kw0z:It’s still weird that she enjoys watching other’s do it to me
2yr
2
Kw0z
Kw0zLv14

Watching videos is different from being a creep in real life, idiot.

Salmon_El_Solomon:I have a question, you watch adult videos? If your answer is yes or not it doesn't may,do you think a girl doesn't see? If you have a girlfriend or some girl who you can talk, ask her. It's the same, but a reality show. She only see it secretly, she doesn't joint and they don't know she is there.
2yr
3
JMC1508
JMC1508Lv1

Watching is a kink for some and it's not the worst kink there is. When someone sceam bloody pervert I narrow my eyes. Every human has some 'pervertions' but if it is not sexual then it is often worse. Asexual; frigid women or 'perfect' gentlemem I say RUN. And you if you're not a virgin then you sacre me.

1yr
2
Kw0z
Kw0zLv14

How so? It’s still not a socially accepted kink, and in most cases would get you broken up with.

JMC1508:Watching is a kink for some and it's not the worst kink there is. When someone sceam bloody pervert I narrow my eyes. Every human has some 'pervertions' but if it is not sexual then it is often worse. Asexual; frigid women or 'perfect' gentlemem I say RUN. And you if you're not a virgin then you sacre me.
1yr
2
jinmorifan_2
jinmorifan_2Lv4

Don't try to justify voyeurism. Adults can defend their fetishes themselves.

JMC1508:Watching is a kink for some and it's not the worst kink there is. When someone sceam bloody pervert I narrow my eyes. Every human has some 'pervertions' but if it is not sexual then it is often worse. Asexual; frigid women or 'perfect' gentlemem I say RUN. And you if you're not a virgin then you sacre me.
1yr
2
JMC1508
JMC1508Lv1

I justify nothing kid I said if you have no sexual kinks you are a sociopath or worse a psychopath. Otherwise you are an hypocrite that pont fingers at other and secretly is the same or worse. I don't have voyeur kink and mine are rather vanilla (Lingerie for ex) but I don't judge unless its harmful to others (unrelated and innocents parties)

jinmorifan_2:Don't try to justify voyeurism. Adults can defend their fetishes themselves.
1yr
2
jinmorifan_2
jinmorifan_2Lv4

Bro, did you forget about the existence of ASEXUAL people?

JMC1508:I justify nothing kid I said if you have no sexual kinks you are a sociopath or worse a psychopath. Otherwise you are an hypocrite that pont fingers at other and secretly is the same or worse. I don't have voyeur kink and mine are rather vanilla (Lingerie for ex) but I don't judge unless its harmful to others (unrelated and innocents parties)
1yr
2
Dexter_Sled_1111
Dexter_Sled_1111Lv13

Did Mc get more powerful? Cause I don't like weak MCs

Layios:To me, it doesn't feel wrong for MC acting like that, we even got few other people who did the same as the MC but ended up punished. He also had the guts to do it 'cause he has acces to the system thing where he could edit the report. As for Nine behaviors, it's more like a child curiosity that led her to spy on them, since she was curious, she spied and asked Doctor why, how, and what is it.
1yr
FlankerKun
FlankerKunLv14

Discord for character art? Gonna pick up the Novel again now that I have more time

Nomanalive:I aspire to improve my writing so it's only natural that there will be character development (since it's one of the most essential parts of a story) And no, no NTR. NO!
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