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2023-10-29 19:48

I’m 64 chapters in. I believe this story has the *capability* to be something on par with the high quality novels found here with the characters & background, but some of the repetitive words/chapters, paragraph similarities, childlike monologue, “muse” being incorrectly & constantly(!) used, and word-play diminishes that quality. The world & character backgrounds, vivid descriptions, story development are all there which can make a great storyline. Too much of a negative of something can truly wipe out a good story. That’s part of the case here when I’m reading over words (like the constant “muse” when it should be “said”, “thought”, etc. or changing sentences for it to make sense while I’m reading. I think the Grammarly app or even an editor could prove highly beneficial for this author to go the next step in their story-writing because there’s definitely a solid base of talent. I enjoyed a different take of wolves & Luna. A little confused on how Alpha can hear heartbeats but not necessarily his wolf brother, so some inconsistencies but nothing that ruins the storyline. It’s definitely getting interesting now that “mother” is involved. If this is from an amateur author, there’s def talent & with anything, there’s always room to grow. Overall, I’m mostly enjoying the story so far. I also love Blue & hope to hear more about his backstory.

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DA_Aloera
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Hello there, thanks for the honest review. Actually, I’m still an amateur who just loves writing, I’ve actually been working hard on getting better and I think that will be reflected on the new book which I’ll be publishing when ready and I promise there won’t be any mistakes, well we all make mistakes but it won’t be as severe as this🥺🥺

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